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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Several people think that it is a good method to accept bad conditions such as lack of money, unsatisfied occupation. Others claim that we must overcome this situation as beneficial things toward. Today, I am going to talk about these discussions and my idea. Let us begin by discussing the first claim. First of all, I do believe that It is a good decision to try and improve such situations. Supporters of this claim suggest that we can
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that it is a
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good
method to accept
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bad
conditions such as lack of money, unsatisfied occupation. Others claim that we
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must
overcome this situation as beneficial things toward.
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Today
, I am going to talk about these discussions and my
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idea
.

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us
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begin
by discussing the
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First of all
, I do believe that It is a
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good
decision to try and
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improve
such situations. Supporters of this claim suggest that we
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can
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
77 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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