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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There has been much discussion revolving around making social service mandatory for High School students. Some educators and policy makers propose that this move will benefit not only the students but also the society, while others argue that compulsory service is no service at all. This essay weighs the merits of this move over its demerits and sides with proposal as beneficial for all. Students learn many realities of life only with grass-root level interactions, and this molds their thinking and prepares future leaders and change-makers of the nation. When schools include community work as part of curriculum, youngsters get an exposure to civil life and learn to empathize with the needs of the less privileged sections of society, albeit some students may feel forced out of their comfort zones. Many surveys show that students who interact closely with the underprivileged sections of society later take up social issues passionately and aim for Civil Service Exams to be a voice for the voiceless. Our society can do with many more young leaders and politicians, community service will go a long way in propelling students in that direction. This move has some detractors who feel mandatory social service will be a burden on students and lead to resentment. Furthermore, they point out to the diverse interests of students and giving them the freedom to pursue their own fields of interest would be ideal for them. It is possible that some students may do it grudgingly with no real interest or service mindedness. This argument may be valid to a certain extent, however on further analysis, a different experience would speak otherwise. To summarize, the argument that making the youth involved in social work involuntarily may restrict the freedom of choice is valid to a certain extent; however, closer examination reveals that many life changing lessons are learnt in such initiatives which can transform society.
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, while others argue that compulsory
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is no
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at all. This essay weighs the merits of this
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over its demerits and sides with proposal as beneficial for all.

Students learn
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realities of life
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with grass-root level interactions, and this molds their thinking and prepares future leaders and
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an exposure to civil life and learn to empathize with the needs of the less privileged sections of
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, albeit
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may feel forced out of their comfort zones.
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that
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who interact
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later take up
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issues
passionately
and aim for Civil
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Exams to be a voice for the voiceless. Our
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can do with
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more young leaders and politicians, community
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will go a long way in propelling
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in that direction.

This
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has
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detractors who feel mandatory
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social
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will be a burden on
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and lead to resentment.
Furthermore
, they point out to the diverse interests of
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students
and giving them the freedom to pursue their
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own
fields of interest would be ideal for them. It is possible that
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some
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students
may do it
grudgingly
with no real interest or
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service
mindedness. This argument may be valid to a certain extent,
however
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further
analysis, a
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different
experience would speak
otherwise
.

To summarize
, the argument that making the youth involved in
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work
involuntarily
may restrict the freedom of choice is valid to a certain extent;
however
, closer examination reveals that
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many
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lessons are
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in such initiatives which can transform
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.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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