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Some people believe that it is best accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other people argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Many people find themselves in situations where they must either accept what life has given them or find a way to move up in the world. In my opinion, although accepting your situation in life may be pragmatic in some cases, it is still better to at least strive to improve your situation as it can usually be bettered to some degree. On the one hand, the vast majority of people are unable to drastically change their situation and acceptance of this fact will make them feel more satisfied with their lives. The best example of this would be those people living in dire economic conditions. Recent research puts the Democratic Republic of Congo as one of the poorest nations on Earth, both due to a lack of developed infrastructure and internal strife in recent years. For a person living in a small village, ravaged by war or famine, it would be cruel to suggest that they should find a way to improve their lives when it might simply be impossible. Instead, such people may feel they are better off accepting that they cannot make any changes to their situation at the present moment and just focus on their own survival and that of their family. These situations are rare but do exist around the world in various countries, particularly if they are at war or experiencing a severe economic downturn. On the other hand, few would dispute the fact that in even the most difficult situations people can make their lives better through continued effort. Instances of people who worked hard and became successful abound in both developed and developing nations. Some relevant examples of this are the postwar situations of countries like Germany, Japan, and South Korea. All those countries were devastated by war to greater and lesser degrees yet they are all currently economic powerhouses. In Japan, World War 2 left their population depleted of workers, a deep national debt due to reparations and infrastructure reduced to rubble. By not accepting their situation they were able to become leaders in technology through notable companies like Sony, Nokia and Toyota. The efficacy of the individuals who had to work hard to improve their lives is reflected in the overall progress of the country and should serve as an example to all war-torn nations. To conclude, there are very few situations where it would be advisable to simply accept an unhappy situation because hard work over a long period will pay off to some degree in the vast majority of cases. By having a more positive attitude it is also more likely that your efforts to make a better life will be rewarded, while a more defeatist attitude is likely to reduce your chances to make changes in life.
Many
people
find themselves in
situations
where they
must
either accept what
life
has
given
them or find a way to
move
up in the world. In my opinion, although accepting your
situation
in
life
may be pragmatic in
some
cases, it is
still
better
to at least strive to
improve
your
situation
as it can
usually
be bettered
to
some
degree.

On the one hand, the vast majority of
people
are unable to
drastically
change
their
situation
and acceptance of this fact will
make
them feel more satisfied with their
lives
. The best example of this would be those
people
living in dire economic conditions. Recent research puts the Democratic Republic of Congo as one of the poorest nations on Earth, both due to a lack of developed infrastructure and internal strife in recent years. For a person living in a
small
village, ravaged by
war
or famine, it would be cruel to suggest that they should find a way to
improve
their
lives
when it might
simply
be impossible.
Instead
, such
people
may feel they are
better
off accepting that they cannot
make
any
changes
to their
situation
at the present moment and
just
focus on their
own
survival and that of their family. These
situations
are rare
but
do exist around the world in various
countries
,
particularly
if they are at
war
or experiencing a severe economic downturn.

On the other hand
, few would dispute the fact that in even the most difficult
situations
people
can
make
their
lives
better
through continued effort. Instances of
people
who worked
hard
and became successful abound in both developed and developing nations.
Some
relevant examples of this are the postwar
situations
of
countries
like Germany, Japan, and South Korea. All those
countries
were devastated
by
war
to greater and lesser degrees
yet
they are all
currently
economic powerhouses. In Japan, World
War
2
left
their population depleted of workers, a deep national debt due to reparations and infrastructure
reduced
to rubble. By not accepting their
situation
they were able to become leaders in technology through notable
companies
like Sony, Nokia and Toyota. The efficacy of the individuals who had to work
hard
to
improve
their
lives
is reflected
in the
overall
progress of the
country
and should serve as an example to all war-torn nations.

To conclude
, there are
very
few
situations
where it would be advisable to
simply
accept an unhappy
situation
because
hard
work over a long period will pay off to
some
degree in the vast majority of cases. By having a more
positive
attitude it is
also
more likely that your efforts to
make
a
better
life
will
be rewarded
, while a more defeatist attitude is likely to
reduce
your chances to
make
changes
in
life
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other people argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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  American English
4 paragraphs
460 words
6.0
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