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Every now and then, man is faced with a choice of embracing some of life's unfavourable circumstances.

Every now and then, man is faced with a choice of embracing some of life's unfavourable circumstances. While some believe that accepting such a situation should be welcomed and seen as ideal, I would argue that every negative situation experienced in life should provide conditions for improvement. More often than not, the major reason for this school of thought is mainly attributed to, religious belief of fate. In other words, believing that everything happens for a particular reason and changing it would be against fate. A research carried out in 2017, by the Globalcom Ministry, for example, suggested that about 65% of persons who accepted unpleasant treatments either from fellow workers or students were religious believers that believed in a higher being called fate. Thus, this group believes that every condition was preordained. A different group, on the contrary, share the opinion that it is favorable to improve unfavorable conditions mainly because it affects mental health. This implies that, every individual should rise above negative circumstances, such as limited funds, as well as, hostile work environment. Take for example, the 2019 article, written and published by the World Health Organization, revealed that the major causes of depression in young adults were hostile working surroundings and also low financial status. Hence, improving the negative conditions would improve our mental health thereby, reducing depression, as well as, death by suicide. In conclusion, while others suggest that every occasion occurs for a reason, I am of the opinion that every person should improve every negative state whether job related or otherwise.
Every
now
and then,
man
is faced
with a choice of embracing
some
of life's
unfavourable
circumstances. While
some
believe that accepting such a situation should
be welcomed
and
seen
as ideal, I would argue that every
negative
situation experienced in life should provide conditions for improvement.

More
often
than not, the major reason for this school of
thought
is
mainly
attributed to, religious belief of fate.
In other words
, believing that everything happens for a particular reason and changing it would be against fate.
A research
carried out in 2017, by the
Globalcom
Ministry,
for example
, suggested that about 65% of persons who
accepted
unpleasant treatments either from fellow workers or students were religious believers that believed in a higher
being called
fate.
Thus
, this group believes that every
condition
was preordained
.

A
different
group,
on the contrary
, share the opinion that it is favorable to
improve
unfavorable conditions
mainly
because
it affects mental health.
This implies that
, every individual should rise above
negative
circumstances, such as limited funds,
as well
as, hostile work environment. Take
for example
, the 2019 article, written and published by the World Health Organization, revealed that the major causes of depression in young adults were hostile working surroundings and
also
low financial status.
Hence
, improving the
negative
conditions would
improve
our mental health thereby, reducing depression,
as well
as, death by suicide.

In conclusion
, while others suggest that every occasion occurs for a reason, I am of the opinion that every person should
improve
every
negative
state whether job related or
otherwise
.
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IELTS essay Every now and then, man is faced with a choice of embracing some of life's unfavourable circumstances.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
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