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Some people believe that industrial growth would alleviate poverty. Some other think industries are a threat to the environment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that industrial growth would alleviate poverty. Some other think industries are a threat to the environment. XVDeA
Industrial growth is one of the main aspects of development of a country. Some people are with a view that it plays a pivotal role in poverty eradication while some others believe that the growth of industries are adversely affecting the environment. This essay will discuss why industrial growth should be restricted as its negative effects on environment outweigh the benefits. Poverty is one of the most serious problems faced by many of the developing countries in today's world. Those countries find the introduction of industries as a solution as it would generate more employment which in turn eradicate Poverty. For example, the introduction of leather factory units in rural areas around India resulted in a significant decline in Poverty level of families around the factory. The reason being every adult member in a family got employed in the factory and thus earn for their livelihood. On the other hand, the environmental problems created by factories are several. The emissions and discharges from factories will eventually lead to air and water pollution. For instance, the chemical waste from a titanium sponge factory in Kerala polluted all the water bodies surrounding the company. This includes wells and rivers, thus creating severe water shortage. Secondly the gas emissions from the industries lead to diseases to the residents near by. There is a famous example of gas tragedy in Bhopal, India and the effects still exists as children are born with diseases even now. These are the most important adverse effects of factories on environment. Growth of industries are needed for development but if allowed to grow without considering the environment will create significant negative impacts. This essay discussed the role of industries in reducing poverty and the negative impacts its creates on the ecosystem. Im my opinion, the industries are great a threat to environment than the so called good effects such as poverty eradication.
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poverty
eradication while
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others believe that the growth of
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industries
are
adversely
affecting the
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environment
. This essay will discuss why industrial growth should
be restricted
as its
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negative
effects on
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environment
outweigh the benefits.

Poverty is one of the most serious problems faced by
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many
of the
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developing countries
in
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today
's world. Those countries find the introduction of
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industries
as a solution as it would generate more employment which in turn eradicate
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Poverty
.
For example
, the introduction of leather
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factory
units in rural areas around India resulted in a significant decline in
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Poverty
level of families around the
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factory
. The reason being every adult member in a family
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got
employed in the
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factory
and
thus
earn for their livelihood.

On the other hand
, the environmental problems created by
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factories
are several. The emissions and discharges from
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factories
will
eventually
lead to air and water pollution.
For instance
, the chemical waste from a titanium sponge
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factory
in Kerala polluted all the water bodies surrounding the
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company
. This includes wells and rivers,
thus
creating severe water shortage.

Secondly
the gas emissions from the
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industries
lead to diseases to the residents
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near by
. There is a
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famous
example of gas tragedy in Bhopal, India and the effects
still
exists as children
are born
with diseases even
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now
. These are the most
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important
adverse effects of
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factories
on environment.

Growth of
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industries
are needed
for development
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but
if
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allowed
to grow without considering the
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environment
will create significant
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negative
impacts. This essay discussed the role of
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industries
in reducing
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poverty
and the
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negative
impacts its creates on the ecosystem.
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my opinion, the
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are great a threat to
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environment
than the
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so called
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good
effects such as
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poverty
eradication.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that industrial growth would alleviate poverty. Some other think industries are a threat to the environment.

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