Some people believe that individuals are responsible for their happiness, while others argue that it is related to factors from personal life. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1
Some people believe that individuals are responsible for their happiness, while others argue that it is related to factors from personal life. v. 1
Some people claim that independent people are accountable for their felicity, while others believe that it is connected with their private life. I believe that the happiness of the person is interconnected to his or her personal life, such as it is directly related to income and business that the person is busy with.
Firstly, people are responsible for their happiness, because nobody can make happiness for you. In life, you have to give it a shot to obtain all your goals for yourself. That is a severe rule of life. Secondly, human lives once in this world. So, you should not spend your time just fooling around, oppositely you have to live by taking joy and pleasure from life.
On the other hand, some people argue that the happiness of people is linked to their money and job. If you have enough money in your pocket, you will have a luxurious life with your family and of course happiness as well. Moving to another point, you spend one part of your day out of threat work. That is why everybody should do their own, favourite job. It should not be stressing and tiring for you. By contrast, you have to take joy and satisfaction while working, otherwise it will effect to your happiness negatively.
To sum up some, people believe that being happy is cognate to yourself when I do think that it is linked to profit and work. Live happily and take pleasure from life that you are living in.
Some
people
claim that independent
people
are accountable for their felicity, while others believe that it
is connected
with their private
life
. I believe that the
happiness
of the person
is interconnected
to
his or her
personal
life
, such as it is
directly
related to income and business that the person is busy with.
Firstly
,
people
are responsible for their
happiness
,
because
nobody can
make
happiness
for you. In
life
, you
have to
give it a shot to obtain all your goals for yourself.
That is
a severe
rule
of
life
.
Secondly
, human
lives
once in this world.
So
, you should not spend your time
just
fooling around,
oppositely
you
have to
live
by taking joy and pleasure from life.
On the other hand
,
some
people
argue that the
happiness
of
people
is linked
to their money and job. If you have
enough
money in your pocket, you will have a luxurious
life
with your family and
of course
happiness
as well
. Moving to another point, you spend one part of your day out of threat work.
That is
why everybody should do their
own
,
favourite
job. It should not be stressing and tiring for you. By contrast, you
have to
take joy and satisfaction while working,
otherwise
it will
effect
to your
happiness
negatively
.
To sum up
some
,
people
believe that being happy is cognate to yourself when I do
think
that it
is linked
to profit and work.
Live
happily
and take pleasure from
life
that you are living in.
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