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Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in the suburbs or in the countryside rather than in the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.9

Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in the suburbs or in the countryside rather than in the cities. v. 9
Traffic congestion is one of the major problems in most of the metropolitan cities. Many people say that the solution to resolve this issue is to motivate citizens to relocate to the suburbs. I certainly disagree with the given statement, because moving to the countryside will not be the feasible solution rather improving transportation services inside the city and encourage people to use that will help to a certain extent. To begin with, because of the industrial developments and opportunities available, individuals tend to move to the urban area and density of the population in such area is more. This caused increased traffic congestion in cities. To resolve this issue, encouraging people to live in the suburbs will not be an effective solution, rather this will increase travel time for them and issue will remain the same. As an illustration, Brampton and Missisauga are the suburbs area around Toronto city, many people prefer to live here since the house prices and rents are comparatively less than the downtown's prices, but it takes around one and half hour to reach to work. Hence, clearly this solution will not help to solve the traffic and transportation issue. On the other hand, improving transportation facilities can tackle the traffic issue to a great extent. People should be encouraged to use public transit, government can declare some discounts on bus or train tickets and monthly passes, so everyone will start using public transit. Another solution to this problem can be encouraging car pooling. Some smart phone applications are already in the market to improve car pool, but they have not gotten enough popular in the society. Third solution could be changing work hours, for example, if one company starts their work at 8 am, then another company in the same area can ask their employees to start work at 9 am. This variation will help to manage the crowd on the road at the peak hours. To conclude, forcing people to move in suburbs and in the countryside will not help to address the problem of traffic congestion. I believe, encouraging them to use car pool and public transit may help along with variation in work hours to manage the crowd.
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Traffic
congestion is one of the major problems in most of the metropolitan
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cities
.
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people
say that the
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solution
to resolve this
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issue
is to motivate citizens to relocate to the
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suburbs
. I
certainly
disagree with the
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given
statement,
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because
moving to the countryside will not be the feasible
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solution
rather
improving transportation services inside the city and encourage
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people
to
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use
that will
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help
to a certain extent.

To
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begin
with,
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because
of the industrial developments and opportunities available, individuals tend to
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move
to the urban
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area
and density of the population in such
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area
is more. This caused increased
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traffic
congestion in
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cities
. To resolve this
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issue
, encouraging
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people
to
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live
in the
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suburbs
will not be an effective
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solution
,
rather
this will increase travel time for them and
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issue
will remain the same. As an illustration, Brampton and
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Missisauga
are the
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suburbs
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area
around Toronto city,
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many
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people
prefer to
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live
here since the
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house
prices and rents are
comparatively
less than the downtown's prices,
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but
it takes around one and half hour to reach to
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work
.
Hence
,
clearly
this
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solution
will not
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help
to solve the
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traffic
and transportation issue.

On the other hand
, improving transportation facilities can tackle the
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traffic
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issue
to a great extent.
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People
should
be encouraged
to
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use
public transit,
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government
can declare
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some
discounts on bus or train tickets and monthly passes,
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so
everyone will
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start
using public transit. Another
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solution
to this problem can be encouraging car pooling.
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Some
smart phone applications are already in the market to
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improve
car pool,
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but
they have not gotten
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enough
popular in the society. Third
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solution
could be changing
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work
hours,
for example
, if one
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company
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starts
their
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work
at 8 am, then another
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company
in the same
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area
can ask their employees to
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start
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work
at 9 am. This variation will
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help
to manage the crowd on the road at the peak hours.

To conclude
, forcing
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people
to
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move
in
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suburbs
and in the countryside will not
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help
to address the problem of
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traffic
congestion. I believe, encouraging them to
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use
car pool and public transit may
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help
along with variation in
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work
hours to manage the crowd.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in the suburbs or in the countryside rather than in the cities. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
367 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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