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Some people believe that children should have to freedom for making mistake while other says that adults should prevent the children from making mistakes give both views and give your opinion

Some people believe that children should have to freedom for making mistake while other says that adults should prevent the children from making mistakes give both views and give your opinion xD6K6
It is the always says that childhood is a golden age from other stages of life. A section of society deems that allows kids to doing error, however, opponent think that mature person should have to restriction over a adolescence for making mistakes. I opine with the later statement and discuss in fourth coming paragraph with the logical conclusion. To commence with, there are some factors which illustrates to why give freedom to children making mistakes. Firstly, kids are calm hearted and polited by nature because they do not have extra burden neither for study nor for additional works due to their future. So that, it should be allowed them when they miss behave and mis calculator. Along with this childhood memory is very sharp and long term if people punish children when they miss behave or doing mistake it can put detrimental effect on their physical as well as mental health. consequently, they cannot grow and develop freely as they want. For example, survey conducted, on primary school scholarship which shows 30% adolescence behave as their further life which they learn in childhood. On the other hand, the beside of that points keeping children in undercontrol by care taker and their adults is also important because in this modern era, growing trend kids adopt the things are frequently as compared to past. If children miss behave by showing temper tantrum it should be the responsibility of adults to guide and taught them to during the childhood stage and taught them to love with the children and respect of elderly. It is not only better for kids but also essential for seniors and cultural because children considered a nation builder. If children have right guidance etiquette and morals outcomly they perform best. In conclusion, although children have a right to live their life to their own preference, yet it should be the onus of seniors to prevent from mistakes and taught best lesson in their life. According to my opinion, experience people should have observed kids time to time for prevent from mistakes.
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think
that mature person should
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have to
restriction over
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adolescence for making
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mistakes
. I opine with the later statement and discuss in fourth coming paragraph with the logical conclusion. To commence with, there are
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some
factors which illustrates to why give freedom to
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children
making
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mistakes
.
Firstly
,
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kids
are calm hearted and
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polited
by nature
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because
they do not have extra burden neither for study nor for additional works due to their future.
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that, it should be
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allowed
them when they miss
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behave
and
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mis
calculator. Along with this childhood memory is
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very
sharp and long term if
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people
punish
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children
when they miss
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behave
or doing
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mistake
it can put detrimental effect on their physical
as well
as mental health.
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consequently
, they cannot grow and develop
freely
as they want.
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, survey conducted, on primary school scholarship which
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shows
30% adolescence
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behave
as their
further
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life
which they learn in childhood.
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,
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the beside of
that points keeping
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children
in
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undercontrol
by care taker and their adults is
also
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important
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because
in this modern era, growing trend
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kids
adopt the things are
frequently
as compared to past. If
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children
miss
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behave
by showing temper tantrum it should be the responsibility of adults to guide and taught them to during the childhood stage and taught them to
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love
with the
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children
and respect of elderly. It is not
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kids
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because
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children
considered a nation builder. If
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children
have right guidance etiquette and morals
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outcomly
they perform best.
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, although
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have a right to
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live
their
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life
to their
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own
preference,
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mistakes
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taught best
lesson in their
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life
. According to my opinion, experience
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people
should have observed
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kids
time to time for
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prevent
from
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mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that children should have to freedom for making mistake while other says that adults should prevent the children from making mistakes give both views and give your opinion

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
343 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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