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Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. g7Ag
Most probably person's culture depicts their native country because they will be habituated to them. Way of clothing, food habits or timings followed, way they speak, way they cook, treating people, behavior and everything will be varying from country to country. For example if I take India into account person belonging to that country will show high respect to elders and get blessings by touching elder's feet and greet the people in different way. In America people wish very sweetly even if they are strangers in a very polite manner. Their outfit, customs, traditions, food habits everything differs. So they might definitely be impacted on the person's culture. But there will be some people who will be less influenced by their country's habits and customs too. If the person's
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IELTS essay Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence.

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