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Nowadays more and more people want to grow things done instantly why is it? do you think it is a postive or negative development?

Nowadays more and more people want to grow things done instantly why is it? do you think it is a postive or negative development? 5DaA
In modern era, number of people are trying to gain of things in short of time. Thus is important for society. but it has both merit and demerit To begin with, there sharps insaunce in the technology a individual get opportunity to do there lot of work in less. For example uses of computer and mobile phone with the help of this people can do lot of work in shortage time like as office meeting, online shopping and chatting. As they have busy schedule. so they have not a much time on extra activities with the help of advance in technology. They are getting chance to utilise their time according to their interest as well as it also beneficial for employment sector. To runs this system companies have to employe lot of people for manage their systems. For example, according to a report by new York time 1. 5milllions people are working in amazon. everyday this company adds 1400 people as their employee. So this is best way to overcome the unemployment is society. Moreover, it impacts bad effect on human health. because in modern time no one ready to go outside for job. Everyone wants indoor job for their earning. This very harmful for handicapp people. Which do not able to work as a labour their job are replacing by health people's. As a result they are feeling them self burden on their parents. for example every year number of disabled people are suciding all over the world because depression about the unemployment. As well as, this development also make unhealthy and less active. As they mostly avoids the physical activities. For example after this development. people have to go the outside for doing their daily works. Which was beneficial for their health. As result in modern time. They are suffering from lot of health related problems like as obesity is major concern in the society. In conclusion, every development have their own merits. That is why people should use it in appropriate way. They shouldn't make it their habit.
In modern era, number of
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people
are trying to gain of things in short of
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time
.
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is
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important
for society.
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but
it has both merit and
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demerit


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insaunce
in the technology
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a
individual
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get
opportunity to do there
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lot of
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work
in less. For
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example
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uses
of computer and mobile phone with the
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help
of this
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people
can do
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lot of
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work
in shortage
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time
like as office meeting, online shopping and chatting. As they have busy schedule.
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so
they have not
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a much
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time
on extra activities with the
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help
of advance in technology. They are getting chance to
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utilise
their
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time
according to their interest
as well
as
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it
also
beneficial for employment sector. To runs this system
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companies
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have to
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employe
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lot
of
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people
for manage their systems. For
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example
, according to a report by
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new York
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time
1. 5milllions
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people
are working
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in amazon
.
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everyday
this
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company
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adds
1400
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people
as their employee.
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So
this
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is best
way to overcome the unemployment is society.

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, it impacts
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bad
effect on human
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health
.
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because
in modern
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time
no one ready to go outside for job. Everyone wants indoor job for their earning. This
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very
harmful for
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handicapp
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people
.
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do not able to
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work
as a
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labour
their job are replacing by
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health
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people
's.
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As
a result they are feeling them self burden on their parents.
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for
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every year number of disabled
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people
are
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suciding
all over the world

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because
depression about the unemployment.
As well
as, this development
also
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make
unhealthy and less active.
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As
they
mostly
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avoids
the physical activities. For
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example
after this development.
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people
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have to
go the outside for doing their daily works. Which was beneficial for their
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health
. As result in modern
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time
. They are suffering from
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lot of
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health
related problems like as obesity is major concern in the society.

In conclusion
, every development have their
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own
merits.
That is
why
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people
should
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use
it in appropriate way. They shouldn't
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make
it their habit.
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IELTS essay Nowadays more and more people want to grow things done instantly why is it? do you think it is a postive or negative development?

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