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It is commonly said that children are pressurized and facing harder and harder academic, social and commercial challenges.

It is commonly said that children are pressurized and facing harder and harder academic, social and commercial challenges. 7DPX
It is commonly said that children are pressurized and facing harder and harder academic, social and commercial challenges. In this essay I will discuss the causes of these pressures and also suggest some solutions to alleviate the troublesome situation. There are a plethora of academic pressures on children. First, today's child is not competing with the next door child, not to compete with the town's child. He is competing with the child of global village. Parents want their child are excelled in every field. They send their children to the top rated schools, the school bags are heavier than the child's himself. Even after, private school hours there are private tut ions. Children do not get time to bloom and bring out their hidden talents. There are a number of social and commercial pressures also faced by children. Socially, the children are in a huge dilemma. They want to adopt the new global culture but their parents force them to confine themselves traditional. Then, they also face peer pressure, which can be good if peers are good, bad if their peers are not well disciplined. They see the latest models of cell phones and other things to their peers hand. When they can not afford to buy them, they get stressed. The solutions are not too simple. Children are handled with great care. Parents should realistic expectations from their children. They should have pr-active approach and give their children. The biggest onus on the schools and teachers. They should have arrange some competitions and taught simultaneously. The aim of competitions should not to be win at all cost. Children have to be taught to win with modesty and lose with grace. To conclude, It is true that children face many pressures, bot some steps should be taken to handle these problems that occurs.
It is
commonly
said that
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children
are pressurized
and facing harder and harder academic, social and commercial challenges. In this essay I will discuss the causes of these
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pressures
and
also
suggest
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some
solutions to alleviate the troublesome situation.

There are a plethora of academic
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pressures
on
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children
.
First
,
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today
's
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child
is not competing with the
next
door
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child
, not to compete with the town's
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child
. He is competing with the
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child
of global village. Parents want their
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child
are excelled
in every field. They
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send
their
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children
to the top rated
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schools
, the
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school
bags are heavier than the child's himself. Even after, private
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school
hours there are private tut ions.
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Children
do not
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get
time to bloom and bring out their hidden talents.

There are a number of social and commercial
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pressures
also
faced by
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children
.
Socially
, the
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children
are in a huge dilemma. They want to adopt the new global culture
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but
their parents force them to confine themselves traditional. Then, they
also
face
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peer
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pressure
, which can be
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good
if
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peers
are
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good
,
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bad
if their
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peers
are not
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well disciplined
. They
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see
the latest models of cell phones and other things to their
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peers
hand. When they can not afford to
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buy
them, they
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get
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stressed
.

The solutions are not too simple.
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Children
are handled
with great care. Parents
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should realistic
expectations from their
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children
. They should have pr-active approach and give their
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children
. The biggest onus on the
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schools
and teachers. They should have
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arrange
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some
competitions and taught
simultaneously
. The aim of competitions should not to be
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win
at all cost.
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Children
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have to
be taught
to win with modesty and lose with grace.

To conclude
, It is true that
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children
face
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many
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pressures
, bot
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some
steps should
be taken
to handle these problems that occurs.
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IELTS essay It is commonly said that children are pressurized and facing harder and harder academic, social and commercial challenges.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
303 words
6.0
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