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Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence.

The fact that culture can be further divided into attitudes, behaviours, values and beliefs, thus it does not have solemnly depend on country of one's origin. Every individual can have their own opinion while considering their own cultural value. In this essay I will emphasize my point of view along with considering the generic opinion. A person's culture for instance can be molded by the country where he is born and bought up. It will definitely have physiological impact on his behaviour, eventually influencing the way he behaves. For instance in India it is mandatory for a married woman to follow certain culture and customs, if she goes against it, she will end up being an outcast. So it becomes a rule to follow certain culture even if it is forcefully engraved. Whereas to contradict the above view we have western cultures, where every individual has their freedom to do whatever they want, having no rules and regulations imposing them to follow their country's way. As a result of globalization and growth of information technology, access to different culture and system are easily available in a flick of seconds to everyone. Independent decision can be taken by the locals residing there, therefore many countries throughout the world does not abide their citizens to follow their origin of culture. In conclusion, my point of view is every being has their sole rights to judge what they wish to follow. The only prospect they should stick to is being genuine and legitimate towards themselves and country.
The fact that
culture
can be
further
divided into attitudes,
behaviours
, values and beliefs,
thus
it does not have
solemnly
depend on
country
of one's origin. Every individual can have their
own
opinion while considering their
own
cultural value. In this essay I will emphasize my point of view along with considering the generic opinion.

A person's
culture
for instance
can
be molded
by the
country
where he
is born
and
bought
up. It will definitely have physiological impact on his
behaviour
,
eventually
influencing the way he behaves.
For instance
in India it is mandatory for a married woman to
follow
certain
culture
and customs, if she goes against it, she will
end
up being an outcast.
So
it becomes a
rule
to
follow
certain
culture
even if it is
forcefully
engraved. Whereas to contradict the above view we have western
cultures
, where every individual has their freedom to do whatever they want, having no
rules
and regulations imposing them to
follow
their country's way.
As a result
of globalization and growth of information technology, access to
different
culture
and system are
easily
available in a flick of seconds to everyone. Independent decision can
be taken
by the locals residing there,
therefore
many
countries
throughout the world does not abide their citizens to
follow
their origin of
culture
.
In conclusion
, my point of view is every being has their sole rights to judge what they wish to
follow
. The
only
prospect they should stick to is being genuine and legitimate towards themselves and
country
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
254 words
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