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Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent to you agree.

I completely agree with the opinion that prevention is better than cure because it requires a lot of investment to research over a disease and then the treatment. Firstly, the essay would discuss the barriers of researching over a disease, secondly it would talk about the possibility of the treatment. Research over diseases have been an ongoing process for centuries yet we are short of cure of a large number of existing diseases including HIV and cancer. It needs a lot of resources to research on any particular diseases such as scientists, research laboratories, hospitals, time, and enough resources to test the medicine. For example, Spanish flu took away few millions of lives in 1919 before anyone could come up with any medicine/procedure to treat people. The success rate of coming up with a medicine of every other diseases is also very low. Treatment of any diseases post successful development of a medicine/procedure is another difficult process. There are many problems in treatment including successful identification of the disease, and enough hospitals, doctors and medicines to cater to the needs of patients. Another problem is whether every patient could access as well as afford the treatment. A disease also prevents a person from working effectively, which in turn hits the economy. For example, people suffering from serious diseases are admitted in hospitals and are unable to continue with their job. To conclude, one can agree with the statement that the cost of research and treatment of a disease is too costly, sometimes costing the lives of patients, and therefore prevention is best option to go with.
I completely
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agree
with the opinion that prevention is better than cure
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because
it requires
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a lot of
investment to
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research
over a
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disease
and then the
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treatment
.
Firstly
, the essay would discuss the barriers of researching over a
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disease
,
secondly
it would talk about the possibility of the treatment.

Research over
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diseases
have been an ongoing process for centuries
yet
we are short of cure of
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a large number of
existing
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diseases
including HIV and cancer. It needs
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a lot of
resources to
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research
on any particular
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diseases
such as scientists,
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research
laboratories, hospitals, time, and
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enough
resources to
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test
the medicine.
For example
, Spanish flu took away few millions of
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lives
in 1919
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before
anyone could
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come
up with any medicine/procedure to treat
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people
. The success rate of coming up with a medicine of every other
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diseases
is
also
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very
low.

Treatment of any
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diseases
post successful development of a medicine/procedure is another difficult process. There are
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many
problems in
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treatment
including successful identification of the
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disease
, and
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enough
hospitals, doctors and medicines to cater to the needs of patients. Another problem is whether every patient could access
as well
as afford the
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treatment
. A
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disease
also
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prevents
a person from working
effectively
, which in turn hits the economy.
For example
,
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people
suffering from serious
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diseases
are admitted
in hospitals and are unable to continue with their job.

To conclude
, one can
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agree
with the statement that the cost of
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research
and
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treatment
of a
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disease
is too costly,
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sometimes
costing the
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lives
of patients, and
therefore
prevention
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is best
option to
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go with
.
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IELTS essay Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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