Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

some people believe teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects, even ones they do not enjoy. others, however, believe that teenagers should only focus on the subjects they are best at or find most interesting. discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

some people believe teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects, even ones they do not enjoy. others, however, believe that teenagers should only focus on the subjects they are best at or find most interesting. v. 1
CERTAIN FOLKS THINK THAT ADOLESENCES SHOULD FOCUS ON EVERY SUBJECTS OF THE GRADE EVEN IF IT CONSUME THEIR WHOLE LIFE, WHEREAS, THE REST OF THE PUBLIC USED TO SAY THAT ADOLESCENCES SHOULD STUDY ONLY ONE SUBJECT WHICH INTEREST THEM THE MOST. FIRSTLY, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS TH BENEFIT OF STUDYING ALL THE SUBJECTS WITH AN EQUAL CONCENTRATION AND SECONDLY, HOE FOCUS ON ONE SUBJECT MAKES A PERSON A MASTER AND PASSIONATE ABOUT WORK. NONETHELESS, I BELIEVE, IF FOLLOWED BOTH THE IDEAS WELL TOGETHER THEN EVERYTHING IS POSSIBLE IN THE WORLD. ON THE ONE HAND, IF A ADOLESCENCE FOCUS IS ON EVERY SUBJECT THEN THEY DO NOT HAVE FACE A FAILURE TIME AS FAILURE IN YOUNG AGE IS NOT PROVVED BENEFICIAL. THIS ALSO PREVENT THEM BEIN OUT FOCUS, PARTING, AND SO ON. FOR EXAMPLE, ACCORDING TO INDIAN SCHOLL CULTURE, ONE HAS TO CLEAR ALL THE SUBJCT TO GET ATRABSFER IN THE NEXT GRAD PR SEMESTER. ON THE OTHER HAND, ONE SUBJET FOCUS MAKES AN YOUNG INDIVIDUAL A MASTER. OWNING TO THE FACT THAT IT REQUIRES A PASSION AND INTEREST TO DO MASTERING THE PERTICULAR SUBJECT. THEREFORE, WHEN ONE HAS INTEREST IN ONE SUBJECT THAT IS CONSIDERED AS AN INNATE QUALITY WITH THE USE HE OR SHE NEVER BE FALL BEHIND. AS HE ALREADY KNOW THE COMPLETEB INFORMATION ABOUT IT. FOR INSTANCE, THE GREAT SCIENTIST ALBERT AINSTAIN, HE HAD FAILED IN THE 10TH STANDERED AND THAN HE SELECTED TO STUDY ONLY BIOLOGY AND NOW HE IS THE GREAT BIOLOGIST AROUND THE GLOBE. IN THE CONCLUSION, BOTH THE IDEAS INDEED PROVID AN ADVANTAGE TO THE YOUNG INDIVIDUALS, BUT ONE SHOULD HAVE ENOUGH KNOWLEDGE AND GUIDANCE ABOUT THE STEPS AS THERE ARE HIGH NUMBER OF CHNACES WHERE THEY MIGHT LED ON THE WRONG TRACK THAT RUIN THEIR FURTHER LIVELIHOOD. . HENCE, THIS INFORMATION CAN BE PROVIDED BY THE TEACHERS AND THE PARENTS.
CERTAIN FOLKS
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
THINK
THAT
Possible spelling mistake found.
ADOLESENCES
SHOULD
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
FOCUS
ON EVERY
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
SUBJECTS
OF THE GRADE EVEN IF IT CONSUME THEIR WHOLE LIFE, WHEREAS, THE REST OF THE PUBLIC
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
USED
TO SAY THAT ADOLESCENCES SHOULD STUDY
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ONLY
ONE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
SUBJECT
WHICH INTEREST THEM THE MOST.
FIRSTLY
, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS TH BENEFIT OF STUDYING ALL THE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
SUBJECTS
WITH AN EQUAL CONCENTRATION AND
SECONDLY
, HOE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
FOCUS
ON ONE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
SUBJECT
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
MAKES
A PERSON A MASTER AND PASSIONATE ABOUT WORK. NONETHELESS, I BELIEVE, IF FOLLOWED BOTH THE
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
IDEAS
WELL TOGETHER THEN EVERYTHING IS POSSIBLE IN THE WORLD.

ON THE ONE HAND, IF A ADOLESCENCE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
FOCUS
IS ON EVERY
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
SUBJECT
THEN THEY DO NOT HAVE FACE A FAILURE TIME AS FAILURE IN YOUNG AGE IS NOT
Possible spelling mistake found.
PROVVED
BENEFICIAL. THIS
ALSO
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
PREVENT
THEM
Possible spelling mistake found.
BEIN
OUT
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
FOCUS
, PARTING, AND
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
SO
ON.
FOR EXAMPLE
, ACCORDING TO INDIAN
Possible spelling mistake found.
SCHOLL
CULTURE, ONE
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
HAS TO
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
CLEAR
ALL THE
Possible spelling mistake found.
SUBJCT
TO
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
GET
Possible spelling mistake found.
ATRABSFER
IN THE
NEXT
GRAD PR SEMESTER.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, ONE
Possible spelling mistake found.
SUBJET
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
FOCUS
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
MAKES
AN YOUNG INDIVIDUAL A MASTER. OWNING TO THE FACT THAT IT REQUIRES A PASSION AND INTEREST TO
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go MASTERING".
DO MASTERING
THE
Possible spelling mistake found.
PERTICULAR
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
SUBJECT
.
THEREFORE
, WHEN ONE HAS INTEREST IN ONE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
SUBJECT
THAT
IS CONSIDERED
AS AN INNATE QUALITY WITH THE
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
USE
HE OR SHE
The adverb 'NEVER' is usually put after the verb 'BE'.
NEVER BE
FALL BEHIND. AS HE ALREADY
The pronoun 'HE' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "knows", "knew".
KNOW
THE
Possible spelling mistake found.
COMPLETEB
INFORMATION ABOUT IT.
FOR INSTANCE
, THE GREAT SCIENTIST ALBERT
Possible spelling mistake found.
AINSTAIN
, HE HAD FAILED IN THE 10TH
Possible spelling mistake found.
STANDERED
AND THAN HE SELECTED TO STUDY
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ONLY
BIOLOGY AND
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
NOW
HE IS THE GREAT BIOLOGIST AROUND THE GLOBE.

IN THE CONCLUSION, BOTH THE
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
IDEAS
INDEED
Possible spelling mistake found.
PROVID
AN ADVANTAGE TO THE YOUNG INDIVIDUALS,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
BUT
ONE SHOULD HAVE
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
ENOUGH
KNOWLEDGE AND GUIDANCE ABOUT THE STEPS AS THERE ARE HIGH NUMBER OF
Possible spelling mistake found.
CHNACES
WHERE THEY MIGHT LED ON THE
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
WRONG
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
TRACK
THAT RUIN THEIR
FURTHER
LIVELIHOOD.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
HENCE
, THIS INFORMATION CAN
BE PROVIDED
BY THE TEACHERS AND THE PARENTS.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
Learning another language is not only learning different words for the same things, but learning another way to think about things.
Flora Lewis

IELTS essay some people believe teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects, even ones they do not enjoy. others, however, believe that teenagers should only focus on the subjects they are best at or find most interesting. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts