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Some people believe it is important for college students to receive education about at least one musical instrument. Some people think that providing music education for college students is not necessary. What is your opinion and why? v.1

Some people believe it is important for college students to receive education about at least one musical instrument. Some people think that providing music education for college students is not necessary. What is your opinion and why? v. 1
The importance of studying history and learning from it was always been considered one of the most heated topics. Indeed, there are different points of view: someone thinks that history cannot teach anything, while others argue that it is a teacher of life from which everybody can learn, in order to avoid the same mistakes and create more rightful societies. I personally believe that studying history is the best way to improve human’s life and understand the world where we live. Consequently, this essay will focus on both opinions and it will explain my point of view. It is well known that life and societies are used to change during the history putting us to the test with very different situations. Clearly today’s problems as well as life goals are not the same than in the past and this led to think that history cannot give us a lecture of our lives. In contrast, in my view, our lives and societies are only the development of historical events and only learning history can give us the key to understand modern times. For instance, many technologies of our times derived from past discoveries, thus, knowing history can let us understand why and how we use such tools. In addition, studying our and others’ past allows to avoid such horrible mistakes and improve our society. I believe that, if we do not know world’s past, we will always turn around the same mistakes without learning how to avoid them. For example, if we did not study political and economic history we could not realise society’s achievements and we would not give the right importance to our freedom and democracy as well as we would not understand the reasons of economic crisis. This means that we could not avoid economic crisis in the future as well as we could lose our democracy without realising it. To conclude, there are many people who think we do not need to learn history, but I firmly believe that without knowing our past we cannot have a better future.
The importance of studying
history
and learning from it was always
been considered
one of the most heated topics.
Indeed
, there are
different
points of view: someone
thinks
that
history
cannot teach anything, while others argue that it is a teacher of
life
from which everybody can learn, in order to
avoid
the same mistakes and create more rightful
societies
. I
personally
believe that studying
history
is the best way to
improve
human’s
life
and
understand
the world where we
live
.
Consequently
, this essay will focus on both opinions and it will
explain
my point of view.

It is
well
known that
life
and
societies
are
used
to
change
during the
history
putting us to the
test
with
very
different
situations.
Clearly
today
’s problems as
well
as
life
goals are not the same
than
in the
past
and this led to
think
that
history
cannot give us a lecture of our
lives
.
In contrast
, in my view, our
lives
and
societies
are
only
the development of historical
events
and
only
learning
history
can give us the key to
understand
modern times.
For instance
,
many
technologies of our times derived from
past
discoveries,
thus
, knowing
history
can
let
us
understand
why and how we
use
such tools.

In addition
, studying our
and others
past
allows
to
avoid
such horrible mistakes and
improve
our
society
. I believe that, if we do not know world’s
past
, we will always turn around the same mistakes without learning how to
avoid
them.
For example
, if we did not study political and economic
history
we could not
realise
society’s
achievements and
we would not give the right importance to our freedom and democracy as
well
as we would not
understand
the reasons of economic crisis. This means that we could not
avoid
economic crisis in the future as
well
as we could lose our democracy without
realising
it.

To conclude
, there are
many
people
who
think
we do not need to learn
history
,
but
I
firmly
believe that without knowing our
past
we cannot have a better future.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe it is important for college students to receive education about at least one musical instrument. Some people think that providing music education for college students is not necessary. What is your opinion and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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