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Some people believe famous people’s support towards international aid organizations draws attention to problems. Others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe famous people’s support towards international aid organizations draws attention to problems. Others think celebrities make the problems less important. 2qVJ

International aid organizations are promoting astonishing outcomes across the world. Here, a certain individuals are assuming that providing assistance to the needy people is indispensable. Others arguing that well being survivals are not fascinating towards their problems. In my opinion, both views are contrasting each other and which provokes the high level for celebrities. First of all, assessment held by volunteers who are working in the organization. In fact, they are knowing the needs of impoverished countries and aiding them by arranging all the things like nurses, psychologists, and the best technical equipment and so on. To illustrate on this, a range of an esteemed species might involve in funding the organizations which is a consequence of endowment. Moreover, a well- known establishments are also associating with World Health Organizations for developing the backward countries, indeed, they are investing funds for their allowances with out wasting a single dollar. On the other hand, the rest of the living souls are contributing money to the charities for their own advertisements. For example, one of my companions from media who is working since nine years, he covered a plethora of operations regarding international aid institutions, and a perilous consequences were coming out from him. Emphatically, media was called by the celebrities for shooting, furthermore, they had ordered that, whatever they had been contributing to the charities and orphanages should be broadcasted in the television. Then they would get a sustainable fame. In conclusion, because of funding money, undeveloped states might procure a splendid approvals from the government. However, some individuals are not taking this issue seriously, and intriguing towards publications. I think aiding is the ultimate contribution not only for the countries but also a nation.

International aid You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmanagementgroupinginstitutionsystem
organizations
 are promoting astonishing outcomes across the world. Here, a certain Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "individual"?individual
individuals
 are assuming that providing assistance to the needy This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
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is
 indispensable. Others arguing that This word is normally spelled with hyphen.well-being
well being
 survivals are not fascinating towards their problems. In my opinion, both views are contrasting each other and which provokes the high level for celebrities.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, assessment held by volunteers who are working in the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmanagementgroupinginstitutionsystem
organization
. In fact, they The verb 'knowing' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
are knowing
 the needs of impoverished countries and aiding them by arranging all the things like nurses, psychologists, and the best technical equipment and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 on. To illustrate on this, a range of an esteemed species might involve in funding the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmanagementgroupinginstitutionsystem
organizations
 which is a consequence of endowment. Moreover
, a well- known establishments are also
 associating with World Health You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmanagementgroupinginstitutionsystem
Organizations
 for developing the backward countries, indeed
, they are investing funds for their allowances This word is usually written together. Did you mean "without"?without
with out
 wasting a single dollar.

On the other hand
, the rest of the living souls are contributing money to the charities for their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 advertisements. For example
, one of my companions from media who Did you mean "am", "are", "aren"? Alternatively, check whether the singular of 'media' should be used.amarearen
is
 working since nine years, he covered a plethora of operations regarding international aid institutions, and a perilous Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "consequence"?consequence
consequences
 were coming out from him. Emphatically
, media was called
 by the celebrities for shooting, furthermore
, they had ordered that, whatever they had been contributing to the charities and orphanages should be broadcasted
The usual collocation for technology is "on," not "in." It is better to say this: "on the television".on the television
in the television
. Then they would This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 a sustainable fame.

In conclusion
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of funding money, undeveloped states might procure a splendid Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "approval"?approval
approvals
 from the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
. However
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 individuals are not taking this issue seriously
, and intriguing towards publications. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 aiding is the ultimate contribution not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 for the countries This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
also
 a nation. 