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some people become famous in their early age. what are the advantages and disadvantages?

some people become famous in their early age. what are the advantages and disadvantages? E3w5M
We live in an age when contemporary standards allow people to obtain fame in their early age. This essay will discuss both drawbacks and advantages of starting career as a celebrity in early ages. Generally, there are some factors that enable adolescents to be famous. To start. Internet plays vital role in this situation as it is accessible to everyone. According to statistics, number of teenagers who are trying to be intern influencer has increased tremendously which is the representative of expansive internet. However, being famous in early age could have some negative consequences. Starting with advantages, famous teenagers can be perceived as an ideal personality. In my honest opinion, well known kids play motivation figure for those who lack encouragement and self-confidence. In addition, in some countries like Turkey, Azerbaijan, parents do not support the idea of being celebrity in early age because they are afraid of their children facing challenges and serious issues. However, increasing number of famous children can make parents think the different way. After considering all the advantages, earning huge amount of money in early age can generates some problems. It might seem that celebrities follow comfortable and healthy life style; however, they spend their money for negative purposes which would result in indispensable and dangerous situations. For instance, over past few years, so many young mumble rappers suffered from dangerous addictions such as illegal drugs or overdrinking alcoholic liquors, so these kinds of activities have huge impact on underaged children. In today’s world large majority of children arrange their future plans based on properties such as expensive cars or mansions that celebrities possess which is not necessarily important. To summarize, in spite of advantages, mentioned before, disadvantages outweigh advantages because not only money and reputation fame come up with but also problems and even death.
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in an
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when contemporary standards
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people
to obtain fame in their
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early
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. This essay will discuss both drawbacks and
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advantages
of starting career as a
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celebrity
in
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early
ages.

Generally
, there are
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some
factors that enable adolescents to be
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famous
. To
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start
. Internet plays vital role in this situation as it is accessible to everyone. According to statistics, number of
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teenagers
who are trying to be intern influencer has increased
tremendously
which is the representative of expansive internet.
However
, being
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famous
in
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early
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age
could have
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negative
consequences.

Starting with
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advantages
,
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teenagers
can
be perceived
as an ideal personality. In my honest opinion, well known kids play motivation figure for those who lack encouragement and self-confidence.
In addition
, in
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some
countries like Turkey, Azerbaijan, parents do not support the
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idea
of being
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celebrity
in
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early
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they are afraid of their
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children
facing challenges and serious issues.
However
, increasing number of
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famous
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children
can
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parents
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the
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different
way.

After considering all the
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advantages
, earning huge amount of money in
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early
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age
can
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problems. It might seem that
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celebrities
follow comfortable and healthy life style;
however
, they spend their money for
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negative
purposes which would result in indispensable and
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dangerous
situations.
For instance
, over past few years,
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young mumble rappers suffered from
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dangerous
addictions such as illegal drugs or
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overdrinking
alcoholic liquors,
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so
these kinds of activities have huge impact on
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underaged
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children
. In
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today
’s world large majority of
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children
arrange their future plans based on properties such as expensive cars or mansions that
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celebrities
possess which is not
necessarily
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important
.

To summarize
,
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, mentioned
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, disadvantages outweigh
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not
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money and reputation fame
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also
problems and even death.
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IELTS essay some people become famous in their early age. what are the advantages and disadvantages?

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  American English
5 paragraphs
301 words
6.0
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