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Some people argue that there is a much wider benefit of eating. Others believe that they have some drawbacks of eating fast food. The following essay will discuss both points of view in detail.

Some people argue that there is a much wider benefit of eating. Others believe that they have some drawbacks of eating fast food. The following essay will o5BLX
Recently, many people enjoy eating fast food because it is convenient for having a meal. Some people argue that there is a much wider benefit of eating. Others believe that they have some drawbacks of eating fast food. The following essay will discuss both points of view in detail. There are many people who prefer eating fast food in spite of having a meal at home. They believe that fast food is playing a larger role in contemporary society. The first advantage of having fast food is that it saves time for lunch or supper. Workers and students go out of their homes and they do not have enough time to prepare meals. Further, the eaters can eat during work. Therefore, it is more convenient for them to eat. Even so, the price is not cheap. For instance, a recent survey has indicated that the number of young eaters has had a significant increase with over 70 per cent in recent years. Whereas, others believe that fast food is a cause of some health dilemmas. I personally agree with this argument. Some researches have shown that fast food contains a high level of fat, which is a cause of being overweight. Obesity is a major issue that many people are concerned about in modern society. For instance, a recent research has indicated that a half of young people who are overweight. In conclusion, fast food has a more important role in modern society but I would emphasize that fast food has disadvantages than its advantages. I believe that we should try to find a balance between fast food and homemade food because fast food is a main cause of obesity.
Recently,
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argue that there is a much wider benefit of
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. Others
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that they have
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drawbacks of
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eating
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. The following essay will discuss both points of view in detail.

There are
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many
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people
who prefer
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eating
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fast
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in spite of
having a meal at home. They
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believe
that
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fast
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is playing a larger role in contemporary society. The
first
advantage of having
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fast
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food
is that it saves time for lunch or supper. Workers and students go out of their
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homes and
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enough
time to prepare meals.
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, the price is not
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, a recent survey has indicated that the number of young eaters has had a significant increase with over 70 per cent in recent years.

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, others
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that
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is a cause of
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some
health dilemmas. I
personally
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researches have shown that
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fast
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contains a high level of
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fat
, which is a cause of being overweight. Obesity is a major issue that
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many
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people
are concerned
about in modern society.
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, a recent research has indicated that a half of young
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people
who are overweight.

In conclusion
,
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fast
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food
has a more
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important
role in modern society
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but
I would emphasize that
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fast
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food
has disadvantages than its advantages. I
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believe
that we should try to find a balance between
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fast
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food
and homemade
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food
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because
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fast
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is a main cause of obesity.
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IELTS essay Some people argue that there is a much wider benefit of eating. Others believe that they have some drawbacks of eating fast food. The following essay will

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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