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Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. others disagree

Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. others disagree kWr2e
It is considered by some students that having an enjoyable job is much better than earning a bunch of money while there are others who argue that having a good salary will lead into a comfortable life. From my perspective, I would argee with the first thought. One the other hand, the reasons why students thought that living a life with an interesting job are varied. Firstly, the more comfortable with your job the more mental of your health will stay stable. When you live with your true feeling, you will living a better life, enjoy everything. All these wonderful things lead to the improvement in life expectancy. In fact, arccoding to the newest science research, who se choose the delightful of job have less problems and issues than the other one. On the other hand, I belive that working hard to have much money will suffer by comparison. In fact, people who has a high position in company always has strong pressure. Unfortunately, this thing will guide into a bad result. One of the worst is their health will be damaged a lot. For example, if you has to much of pressure, you will not find the time for taking care of yourself. Further more, you will not have anytime for your family. The consequence of that lifestyle is you will be lonely. In conclusion, although it is undeniable that having a bunch of money has come certain benefits to people, I think the followed with your feeling in working is much more important
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students that having an enjoyable
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better than earning a bunch of money while there are others who argue that having a
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hand, the reasons why students
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with an interesting
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are varied
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, the more comfortable with your
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the more mental of your health will stay stable. When you
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with your true feeling, you will
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a better
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, enjoy everything. All these wonderful things lead to the improvement in
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expectancy. In fact,
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money will suffer by comparison. In fact,
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a high position in
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always has strong pressure. Unfortunately, this thing will guide into a
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result. One of the worst is their health will
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of pressure, you will not find the time for taking care of yourself.
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more, you will not have anytime for your family. The consequence of that lifestyle is you will be lonely.

In conclusion
, although it is undeniable that having a bunch of money has
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certain benefits to
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IELTS essay Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. others disagree

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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