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Some people argue that it is better to be unemployed than to be employed in jobs they do not enjoy. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that it is better to be unemployed than to be employed in jobs they do not enjoy. WBJq
Many young people nowadays claim that if we find no pleasure following a career, we should instantly give up and stay out of the labor force temporarily rather than remain in that position. From my personal point of view, I agree with this opinion. It is true that although having a discontent job can bring us some benefits, at least some money to make ends meet, its costs are much higher. On one hand, continually doing something we do not like affects our working attitude. No one wants to devote all his heart to a job that he hates, which results in not only below-standard working quality but also bad mental health. Moreover, keeping doing a job we do not like may prevent us from opportunities that our beloved careers offer. For example, if you accidentally find a job that you like and want to change post instantly, but the law says that you have to notice the human resource manager one month in advance, the golden chance may pass by right in front of your face. On the other hand, being unemployed temporarily may bring about chances to do some amazing things that can even change your life. One high school friend of mine provides an attractive story about his life as an example. Taking up a post as a boring officer after graduating, it took him 3 months to decide to quit, and started to learn photography, which he had always been loving since he was a kid. He spent all his savings buying a DSLR camera, registered photography courses, became a freelancer and spent time travelling, taking pictures of beautiful sceneries. Until now, he got some local and international prizes for his creative works, and became a full-time photographer for a big studio in Asia. In conclusion, I do believe that our dreams are the things that we should always follow, even when the roads may be tougher and riskier than usual. As we all know, the higher risk, the higher return as well.
Many
young
people
nowadays claim that if we find no pleasure following a career, we should
instantly
give up and stay out of the labor force
temporarily
rather
than remain in that position. From my personal point of view, I
agree
with this opinion. It is true that although having a discontent
job
can bring us
some
benefits, at least
some
money to
make
ends
meet
, its costs are much higher. On one hand,
continually
doing something we do not like affects our working attitude. No one wants to devote all his heart to a
job
that he hates, which results in not
only
below-standard working quality
but
also
bad
mental health.
Moreover
, keeping doing a
job
we do not like may
prevent
us from opportunities that our beloved careers offer.
For example
, if you
accidentally
find a
job
that you like and want to
change
post
instantly
,
but
the law says that you
have to
notice the human resource manager one month in advance, the golden chance may pass by right in front of your face.
On the other hand
,
being unemployed
temporarily
may bring about chances to do
some
amazing things that can even
change
your life. One high school friend of mine provides an attractive story about his life as an example. Taking up a post as a boring officer after graduating, it took him 3 months to decide to quit, and
started
to learn photography, which he had always
been loving
since he was a kid. He spent all his savings buying a DSLR camera, registered photography courses, became a freelancer and spent time travelling, taking pictures of
beautiful
sceneries. Until
now
, he
got
some
local and international prizes for his creative works, and became a full-time photographer for a
big
studio in Asia.
In conclusion
, I do believe that our dreams are the things that we should always follow, even when the roads may be tougher and riskier than usual. As we all know, the higher
risk
, the higher return
as well
.
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IELTS essay Some people argue that it is better to be unemployed than to be employed in jobs they do not enjoy.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
337 words
6.0
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