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Some people argue capital punishment is a brutal decision and should be abolished. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue capital punishment is a brutal decision and should be abolished. OgPek
When the person does the bad activity, things which breaks the rules and regulation as well as the low of society, then he gets the punishment. When the normal crime done by him then generally, he gets soft punishment. But when the serious crime like murder, rape and the bad activity which concern with the national security done, then he gets the capital punishment. I agreed with it that its brutal and harsh decision and it should be abolished. Firstly, Giving the capital punishment to the person having serious crime charges is not only one option. If person has done wrong thing then he must have right to realized his mistakes. When the capital punishment is given, then life of the person ends with the guilt only. He not even gets the change to regrade it. Instead of it the such types of punishments must be given to him which makes the good changes in him. Secondly, instead of focusing on the harsh punishment we have to change their criminal mindset. We have to create positivity in them. If we make the death punishment is only solution then may criminal mindset change badly. For example, if one criminal kill one person, then he gets the punishment of death, then he can think that punishment of one murder is also death and punishment of many murders is also death then why not to do the many murders. However, if the punishment of death is completely banned or abolished, then the fear of it, is completely vanished from criminal’s mind. They are not feeling any fear before doing the crime. In conclusion, instead of giving the harsh punishment like death, the court must have to think on the other option of the punishment to.
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as well
as the low of society, then he
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gets
the
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punishment
. When the normal crime done by him then
generally
, he
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gets
soft
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punishment
.
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when the serious crime like murder, rape and the
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bad
activity which concern with the national security done, then he
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gets
the capital
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punishment
. I
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agreed
with it that its brutal and harsh decision and it should
be abolished
.

Firstly
, Giving the capital
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punishment
to the
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person
having serious crime charges is not
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only
one option. If
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person
has done
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wrong
thing then he
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must
have right to realized his mistakes. When the capital
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punishment
is
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given
, then life of the
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person
ends with the guilt
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only
. He not even
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change
to regrade it.
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punishments
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be
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given
to him which
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good
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changes
in him.

Secondly
,
instead
of focusing on the harsh
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punishment
we
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have to
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change
their
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criminal
mindset. We
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have to
create positivity in them. If we
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make
the death
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punishment
is
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solution then may
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criminal
mindset
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badly
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, if one
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criminal
kill one
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person
, then he
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gets
the
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punishment
of death, then he can
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of one murder is
also
death and
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of
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many
murders is
also
death then why not to do the
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murders.

However
, if the
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punishment
of death is completely banned or abolished, then the fear of it, is completely vanished from
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criminal’s
mind. They are not feeling any fear
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before
doing the crime.

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,
instead
of giving the harsh
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punishment
like death, the court
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must
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on the other option of the
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to.
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IELTS essay Some people argue capital punishment is a brutal decision and should be abolished.

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