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Some People Are Leaving The Countryside To Live In Cities And Towns what are the causes and solutions.

Some People Are Leaving The Countryside To Live In Cities And Towns what are the causes and solutions. 7ab36
Nowadays more and more youngsters are moving from rural areas to urban areas in search of better jobs and lifestyle leaving their old parents behind. This essay will discuss the problems related to this move and will also suggest an appropriate solution. To begin with, youngsters are moving to urban areas in search of better education and job opportunities which they cannot find in rural areas. In cities there are good universities which will give them better education and improved career prospects. Also, plenty of jobs are available in cities. This is the predominant reason young people prefer towns to villages. Unfortunately, this migration causes a lot of hardship to seniors who are left behind. They have no one to take care of them when they need support the most. Consequently, many aged people are now seeking admission in old age homes where they may or may not receive adequate care. This problem can be solved if governments create higher educational institutions and job opportunities in rural areas. As a result of this, more people will prefer to stay in their villages. The government should sign contracts with big companies for creating job opportunities in villages /rural areas. To sum up, old people play a crucial role in our society as their knowledge and experience can help a society grow and leaving them alone will lead to several problems. The government can tackle this problem by creating more opportunities for younger generation living in rural areas.
Nowadays more and more youngsters are moving from
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rural
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to urban
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areas
in search of better
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jobs
and lifestyle leaving their
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old
parents behind. This essay will discuss the
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problems
related to this
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move
and will
also
suggest an appropriate solution.

To
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begin
with, youngsters are moving to urban
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areas
in search of better education and
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job
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opportunities
which they cannot find in
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rural
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areas
. In cities there are
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good
universities which will give them better education and
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improved
career prospects.
Also
,
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plenty
of
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jobs
are available in cities. This is the predominant reason young
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people
prefer towns to villages. Unfortunately, this migration causes
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a lot of
hardship to seniors who are
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left
behind. They have no one to take care of them when they need support the most.
Consequently
,
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many
aged
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people
are
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now
seeking admission in
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old
age homes where they may or may not receive adequate care.

This
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problem
can
be solved
if
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governments
create higher educational institutions and
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job
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opportunities
in
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rural
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areas
.
As a result
of this, more
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people
will prefer to stay in their villages. The
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government
should
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sign
contracts with
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big
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companies
for creating
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job
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opportunities
in villages /rural areas.

To sum up,
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old
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people
play a crucial role in our society as their knowledge and experience can
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help
a society grow and leaving them alone will lead to several
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problems
. The
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government
can tackle this
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problem
by creating more
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opportunities
for younger generation living in
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rural
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areas
.
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IELTS essay Some People Are Leaving The Countryside To Live In Cities And Towns what are the causes and solutions.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
246 words
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