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Some peolpe think that the youngsters should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community. Are disadvantages of this requirement greater than the benefit for the community and individuals?

Some peolpe think that the youngsters should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community. Are disadvantages of this requirement greater than the benefit for the community and individuals? 5gBN
In today's era, many youngsters should help for the community. Young people ought to volunteer themselves in the community work. There are few disadvantage for adolscents but some positive overweighs the drawbacks of the youth performing community work. There are several reason why community work is essential for young people but drawbacks also there that novices doesnot concentrate on their studies. They distracted from their daily routine. On Sizzling time they did social work which is unpaid inspite of doing their vacation homework. One of them most obvious disadvantage is might seems that the poor academic performances. These volunteer work can still keep far them from their courses. Moreover, if volunteer work required a full time effort then they have to sacrifies the time for the academic career. The extra crricular activites take long time through which they bleak career prospects. For instance, the recent research survey show that adolscents show less amont of concentrate in academic whereas 70% are interested in social work. Nevertheless, despite the above, these communities are beneficial for both the social and youngsters. Firstly, they help poor and needy people which is desirable for adolscents. In sizzling weather, they help through chilled water, give slippers to begger, some distribute different juices that is free of cost on road specially the sikh people does it on front of gurudwara all these done by the community. These work prepetual inspires in them high sense of respinsiblity. They learn new things which help them out in their career. Conversly, Student met different type of people which hone varoius crucial life skills. For instance, work with ample people of different age and learn multiple linguistic languages which help them for profession in future. To become volunteer is very multiple merits for the youngsters. To conclusion, Community work has its own importance. Youngsters gain different knowledge like they help needy for medication purpose so they acquire knowledge on particular field. Yes if there are pros to work with community then definitely there are few cons for the students.
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youngsters should
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help
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community
. Young
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people
ought to
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volunteer
themselves in the
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community
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work
. There are
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adolscents
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some
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positive
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overweighs
the drawbacks of the youth performing
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community
work.

There are several reason why
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community
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work
is essential for young
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people
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but
drawbacks
also
there that novices
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doesnot
concentrate on their studies. They distracted from their daily routine. On Sizzling
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time
they did social
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work
which is unpaid
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inspite
of doing their vacation homework. One of them most obvious disadvantage is might seems that the poor academic performances. These
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volunteer
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work
can
still
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keep
far them from their courses.
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, if
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volunteer
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work
required a full
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time
effort then they
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have to
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sacrifies
the
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time
for the academic career. The extra
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crricular
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activites
take long
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time
through which they bleak career prospects.
For instance
, the recent research survey
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show
that
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adolscents
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less
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of concentrate in academic whereas 70%
are interested
in social work.

Nevertheless
, despite the above, these
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communities
are beneficial for both the social and youngsters.
Firstly
, they
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help
poor and needy
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people
which is desirable for
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adolscents
. In sizzling weather, they
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help
through chilled water, give slippers to
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begger
,
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some
distribute
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different
juices
that is
free of cost on road
specially
the
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sikh
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people
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does
it on front of
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gurudwara
all these done by the
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community
. These
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work
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prepetual
inspires in them high sense of
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respinsiblity
. They learn new things which
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help
them out in their career.
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Conversly
, Student met
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different
type of
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people
which hone
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varoius
crucial life
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skills
.
For instance
,
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work
with ample
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people
of
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different
age and learn multiple linguistic languages which
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help
them for profession
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in future
. To become
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volunteer
is
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very
multiple merits for the youngsters.

To conclusion,
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Community
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work
has its
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own
importance. Youngsters gain
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different
knowledge like they
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help
needy for medication purpose
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so
they acquire knowledge on particular field. Yes if there are pros to
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work
with
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community
then definitely there are few cons for the students.
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IELTS essay Some peolpe think that the youngsters should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community. Are disadvantages of this requirement greater than the benefit for the community and individuals?

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