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Importance should be given to academic subjects by school . Music and sports should not be as subject . Do you agree or Disagree ? Give reasons and Examples of your answer.

Importance should be given to academic subjects by school. Music and sports should not be as subject. Give reasons and Examples of your answer. 8N6B
Education plays significant role in children's life. Education is most important part to raise a child, by giving them education they become a great person. Nowadays, education is become must activity for children. Parents put their children's in school to get education. In school all subjects are equally important for children. Only give an importance on core subjects not on music and sports. I completely disagree with that statement. Reasons for disagreement are given in ensuing paragraphs.
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they become a great person. Nowadays,
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IELTS essay Importance should be given to academic subjects by school. Music and sports should not be as subject. Give reasons and Examples of your answer.

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1 paragraphs
77 words
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