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Some parents motivate their children by telling them that they can do whatever they want if they worked hard. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this method?

Some parents motivate their children by telling them that they can do whatever they want if they worked hard. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this method? 7rmj6
Countries have different ways in motivating their children. In some nations, children are taught that they are capable of everything they want as long as they push themselves to the limit. This essay will discuss the advantages of this method mainly raising strong and confident children. This essay shall also present two disadvantages namely the unrealistic and unflexible nature of such breeding. Children who grow knowing the fact that they can achieve what they seek no matter how difficult it is are more likely to be more self-confident and strong as a person. To illustrate, youngsters when believing that anything is possible through hard work are able to build a life for themselves regardless of the difficult conditions they may encounter. For example, some people of my acquaintance are already using this system of education with their children especially if they are twinned in order to prepare them for life and to avoid the idea that one of them may count on the other. In addition, children are usually stubborn, so if we guide that trait into something good like stubborness in pursuing one's goals, we shall raise a strong generation who who has what it takes to reach the imposiible. That's why, this methodology has proven to have good results regarding our children's merit in the long term. Although this tendency has its cons in conveying some desirable personal qualities in children, it is said to have some disadvantages as well. Firstly, planting this idea in the child's head is somehow misleading because of its unrealistic nature. For instance, children should learn to do their best but they shouls be aware that this is not enough to guarntee success at the end of the way because life does not go like that and by doing so, we protect them from future disapointments. Secondly, such mentality lacks the flexiblity needed in the process of handling life hardships. As an a example, I was taught when I was young that sometimes I will have to choose between what I want and what is good for me and I could not understanf this until now when I just let it go with thing that is not worth fightinh for and for that this fact should be present in our children's intellect. For these reasons, the provided claim is critised for its imaginary and solid nature. In summary, in some institutes, a number of persons educate their sons and daughters that hard working necessarily means a golden key to one's desires. While this can be very useful in growing strong and confident indentity, this can disadvantageous too taking into consideration the cruelity and injustice of reality.
Countries have
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different
ways in motivating their
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children
. In
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some
nations,
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children
are taught
that they are capable of everything they want as long as they push themselves to the limit. This essay will discuss the advantages of this method
mainly
raising
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strong
and confident
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children
. This essay shall
also
present two disadvantages
namely
the unrealistic and unflexible nature of such breeding.

Children who grow knowing the fact that they can achieve what they seek no matter how difficult it is are more likely to be more self-confident and
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strong
as a person. To illustrate, youngsters when believing that anything is possible through
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hard
work are able to build a
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life
for themselves regardless of the difficult conditions they may encounter.
For example
,
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some
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people
of my acquaintance are already using this system of education with their
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children
especially
if they
are twinned
in order to prepare them for
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life
and to avoid the
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idea
that one of them may count on the other.
In addition
,
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children
are
usually
stubborn,
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so
if we guide that trait into something
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good
like
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stubborness
in pursuing one's goals, we shall raise a
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strong
generation
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who who
has what it takes to reach the
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imposiible
. That's why, this methodology has proven to have
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good
results regarding our children's merit in the long term.

Although this tendency has its cons in conveying
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some
desirable personal qualities in
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children
, it
is said
to have
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some
disadvantages
as well
.
Firstly
, planting this
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idea
in the child's head is somehow misleading
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because
of its unrealistic nature.
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,
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children
should learn to do their best
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but
they
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shouls
be aware that this is not
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enough
to
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guarntee
success at the
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end
of the way
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because
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life
does not go like that and by doing
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so
, we protect them from future
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disapointments
.
Secondly
, such mentality lacks the
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flexiblity
needed in the process of handling
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life
hardships. As
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example, I
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when I was young that
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sometimes
I will
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have to
choose between what I want and what is
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good
for me and I could not
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understanf
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now
when I
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let
it
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thing
that is
not worth
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fightinh
for and for that this fact should be present in our children's intellect. For these reasons, the provided claim is
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critised
for its imaginary and solid nature.

In summary, in
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some
institutes, a number of persons educate their sons and daughters that
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hard working
necessarily
means a golden key to one's desires. While this can be
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very
useful in growing
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strong
and confident
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indentity
, this can disadvantageous too taking into consideration the
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cruelity
and injustice of reality.
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IELTS essay Some parents motivate their children by telling them that they can do whatever they want if they worked hard. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this method?

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