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Some museums these days charge an admission fee while others do not. Does the practice of asking an admission fee outweigh any disadvantages? Discuss, including exampled from your own knowledge and experience.

Some museums these days charge an admission fee while others do not. Does the practice of asking an admission fee outweigh any disadvantages? Discuss, including exampled from your own knowledge and experience. kYWj8
Although many museums today remain open to the public for free, there are some that have already started changing nominal fees for admission. These establishments claim that doing so is important in order to fund the museum operations. However, I am of the opinion that there are more drawbacks than benefits with implementing this policy. Arguably, the advantage of having an admission fee for the museum is that it provides a steady stream of income that can be used to improve the quality and variety of displays to the ultimate benefit of visitors. Small museums often struggle to stay open if they rely solely on government funding since it may be inadequate to meet even the most rudimentary cost of staffing, power, security and maintenance. Hence, with these conditions, this extra revenue may be the difference between those museums' survival and inevitable closure. However, this scheme may also be deterimental to the museums. Many find such fees largely unacceptable. It is hard enough to get people of any age to go to museums as it is, without the added disincentive of a fee to add to their reasons to stay away. Museums seem to appeal to very few, and those that are government-run are poorly maintained and badly managed. Displays are largely static, uninspired and unchanged for years at a time. Charging a fee, in these circumstances, will only serve to dissuade people from paying these places a visit. As a consequence, instead of going to a museum, people just choose to spend their money on other cheaper and more worthwhile activities, considerably reducing viewership in museums and prompting governments or operators to completely shut them down in place of other more popular or profitable entertainment or recreational facilities. In this situation, therefore, instead of the admission fees helping the museums to thrive, they instead case these establishments to completely stop operating. In conclusion, the disadvantages of charging an admission fee far outweigh its advantages. Having such policy will only discourage more citizens from visiting museums, ultimately defeating the purpose of imposing it in the first place.
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today
remain open to the public for free, there are
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that have already
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changing nominal
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fees
for
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admission
. These establishments claim that doing
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is
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important
in order to fund the
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museum
operations.
However
, I am of the opinion that there are more drawbacks than benefits with implementing this policy.

Arguably
, the advantage of having an
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admission
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fee
for the
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museum
is that it provides a steady stream of income that can be
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used
to
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improve
the quality and variety of displays to the ultimate benefit of visitors.
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Small
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museums
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often
struggle to stay open if they rely
solely
on
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government
funding since it may be inadequate to
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meet
even the most rudimentary cost of staffing, power, security and maintenance.
Hence
, with these conditions, this extra revenue may be the difference between those museums' survival and inevitable closure.

However
, this scheme may
also
be
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deterimental
to the
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museums
.
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find such
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fees
largely
unacceptable. It is
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hard
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enough
to
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get
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people
of any age to go to
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museums
as it is, without the
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added
disincentive of a
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fee
to
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add
to their reasons to stay away.
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seem to appeal to
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few, and those that are
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government
-run are
poorly
maintained and
badly
managed. Displays are
largely
static, uninspired and unchanged for years at a time. Charging a
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fee
, in these circumstances, will
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only
serve to dissuade
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people
from paying these places a visit.

As a consequence,
instead
of going to a
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museum
,
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people
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just
choose to spend their money on other cheaper and more worthwhile activities,
considerably
reducing viewership in
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museums
and prompting
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governments
or operators to completely shut them down in place of other more popular or profitable entertainment or recreational facilities. In this situation,
therefore
,
instead
of the
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admission
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fees
helping the
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museums
to thrive, they
instead
case these establishments to completely
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stop
operating.

In conclusion
, the disadvantages of charging an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
admission
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fee
far outweigh its advantages. Having such policy will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
discourage more citizens from visiting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museums
,
ultimately
defeating the purpose of imposing it in the
first
place.
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IELTS essay Some museums these days charge an admission fee while others do not. Does the practice of asking an admission fee outweigh any disadvantages? Discuss, including exampled from your own knowledge and experience.

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