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Some languages are increasingly spoke in different countries, while the usage of others is rapidly declining. Is this a positive or negative development? v.1

Some languages are increasingly spoke in different countries, while the usage of others is rapidly declining. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 1
Researching family history is becoming popular with the people. Getting to know about the roots, is instilled by curiosity to learn about different cultures and regions from which their roots belong as well as disease patterns in the family which can be seen beneficial for their health as well as tourism. Curiosity is one of the main reasons for individuals to find out more about their family background. People are becoming more aware as they read about mass migrations of individuals immigrating to different countries, which generates questions about their background in their mind. Getting to know more about the background, encourages people to discover different cultures and places which promotes tourism. For instance, if a person has never visited a country before, he would have another reason to visit and to know more about the culture and the place and promotes tourism. Another reason for exploring the background is it helps them to discover the trends in the family tree. Some gifts, skills, and diseases are hereditary, which can be interesting for people to learn, how many others in their family shared these from previous generations. For example, in the case of diseases, some of these could be avoided by taking necessary precautions, which can improve the living condition. In conclusion, it can be advantageous for people to learn more about the family's background and origins. Not only they get to know more about the skills, and patterns in the tree, but also it encourages people to discover new places.
Researching
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history is becoming popular with the
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people
. Getting to
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know
about the roots,
is instilled
by curiosity to learn about
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different
cultures and regions from which their roots belong
as well
as disease patterns in the
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family
which can be
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seen
beneficial for their health
as well
as tourism.

Curiosity is one of the main reasons for individuals to find out more about their
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family
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background
.
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People
are becoming more aware as they read about mass migrations of individuals immigrating to
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different
countries, which generates questions about their
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background
in their mind. Getting to
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know
more about the
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background
, encourages
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people
to discover
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different
cultures and places which promotes tourism.
For instance
, if a person has never visited a country
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before
, he would have another reason to visit and to
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know
more about the culture and the place and promotes tourism.

Another reason for exploring the
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background
is it
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helps
them to discover the trends in the
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family
tree.
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Some
gifts,
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skills
, and diseases are hereditary, which can be interesting for
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people
to learn, how
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many
others in their
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family
shared these from previous generations.
For example
, in the case of diseases,
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some
of these could
be avoided
by taking necessary precautions, which can
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improve
the living condition.

In conclusion
, it can be advantageous for
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people
to learn more about the family's
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background
and origins. Not
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only
they
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get
to
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know
more about the
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skills
, and patterns in the tree,
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but
also
it encourages
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people
to discover new places.
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IELTS essay Some languages are increasingly spoke in different countries, while the usage of others is rapidly declining. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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