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Some individuals are insulting other people with the Internet.Discuss both views

Some individuals are insulting other people with the Internet. Discuss both views BJRBa
Many people abuse the internet contact with other people and contemporary affairs. This is essay shall first discuss an advantage of the quick and the easy access to the people and news that the social media provides, followed by a disadvantage of people losing their ability of having a human connection. Technology and the internet enable us to get in touch with our friends and family that long distance. If students study foreign country, they will connect with their family. For example, if today is a relative's birthday, a person study or work abroad can congratulate a relative that on the internet. Additionally, while the people are away from their home, they can keep themselves apprised about what is happening in their region. For instance, many students or people see the news in their country via Google, Facebook and etc. On the downside, a large disadvantage these the internet causes is it diminishes the need to have face to face interactions. In my view, if people connected with other people via social network, their human attitude will frustrate. For example, last year my nephew Sultan just played on the phone in the New Year and didn't celebrate the New Year with us which made all my relatives upset with Sultan. To sum up, although social media can give us a rapid connection to people across the globe, it can make us lose our human nature of meeting people as well. In my opinion, the advantages of social media surely outweigh the disadvantages because humans have an innate ability to connect with people.
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abuse the internet contact with other
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and contemporary affairs. This is essay shall
first
discuss an advantage of the quick and the easy access to the
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people
and
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news
that the
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social
media provides, followed by a disadvantage of
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people
losing their ability of having a
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human
connection.

Technology and the internet enable us to
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get
in touch with our friends and family that long distance. If students study foreign country, they will connect with their family.
For example
, if
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today
is a relative's birthday, a person study or work abroad can congratulate a relative that on the internet.
Additionally
, while the
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people
are away from their home, they can
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keep
themselves apprised about what is happening in their region.
For instance
,
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students or
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people
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in their country via Google, Facebook
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On the downside, a large disadvantage these the internet causes is it diminishes the need to have face to face interactions. In my view, if
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connected with other
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network, their
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attitude will frustrate.
For example
, last year my nephew Sultan
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played on the phone in the
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Year and didn't celebrate the
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Year with us which made all my relatives upset with Sultan.

To sum up, although
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social
media can give us a rapid connection to
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people
across the globe, it can
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make
us lose our
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human
nature of meeting
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as well
. In my opinion, the advantages of
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media
surely
outweigh the disadvantages
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because
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humans
have an innate ability to connect with
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IELTS essay Some individuals are insulting other people with the Internet. Discuss both views

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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