Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some humans hope that children who are given packet cash every week have less problems managing money when they became adults.

Some humans hope that children who are given packet cash every week have less problems managing money when they became adults. NVeey
Some humans hope that children who are given packet cash every week have less problems managing money when they became adults. Children do'nt know how to spend packet cash properly from a young age. I quite disagree parents just give money /Admittedly not everyone is same children are divided in 2 types. There first type of children are safe packet money and do'nt spend much the second type of children are go to the future in wrong way. For instance in American children are working from a young age. They are can distribute newspapers or make another types of toys. Usually they have account number in bank. this is a good way for American children. ² Meanwhile it is worth mentioning that same people need to control children packet money. Also children love to buy most chemical sweets or toys for their packet cash. But people things this is normal. Mainly this affects the child s future. secondly problems managing money when they became adults. I totally disagree with the given idea that children given packet money every week. As a result nowadays more adults don't have future plan. Definetly future plan is a key of modern life. ⚠️The reason citied above have justified. I totally do not accept the fact that Some nation belive that children who are tending packet cash every week have less problems managing money when they became adults
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
humans hope that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
who are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
packet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cash
every week have
Did you mean "fewer"? The noun problems is countable.
less
problems managing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
when they became
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
adults
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Children
Did you mean "don't"?
do'nt
know how to spend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
packet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cash
properly
from a young age. I quite disagree parents
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
give
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
/
Admittedly
not everyone is same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
are divided
in 2
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
types
. There
first
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
type
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
are safe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
packet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
and
Did you mean "don't"?
do'nt
spend much the second
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
type
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
are
Consider using a past participle here: "gone".
go
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
future
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
way.
For instance
in American
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
are working from a young age. They are can distribute newspapers or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
types
of toys.
Usually
they have account number in bank.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
this
is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
way for American
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. ² Meanwhile it is worth mentioning that same
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
need to control
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
packet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
most chemical sweets or toys for their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
packet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cash
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
things this is normal.
Mainly
this affects the child s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
future
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
secondly
problems managing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
when they became
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
adults
. I
totally
disagree with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
packet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
every week.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
a result nowadays more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
adults
don't have
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
future
plan.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Definetly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
future
plan is a key of modern life.
Possible spelling mistake found.
⚠️The
reason
Possible spelling mistake found.
citied
above have justified. I
totally
do not accept the fact that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
nation
Possible spelling mistake found.
belive
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
who are tending
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
packet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cash
every week have
Did you mean "fewer"? The noun problems is countable.
less
problems managing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
when they became
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
adults
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some humans hope that children who are given packet cash every week have less problems managing money when they became adults.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
232 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Some humans hope that children who are given packet cash every week have less problems managing money when they became adults.