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Some each individual trust that children who are provided pocket money every week have less problems controling money when they become adults.

Some each individual trust that children who are provided pocket money every week have less problems controling money when they become adults. KW6P3
Some each individual trust that children who are provided pocket money every week have less problems controling money when they become adults. I agree with the opinion that when children are young enough to work they do not know the value of money so well they come to realize how much work it takes to do this over time. And they learn how to distribute the money properly. Of course, their parents help them with this. And over the time, children manage money by following the example of how they spent it the second reason why I agree as a result children begin to own their own money in the bank and you see they are already making independent money and adopting to spending it on their own. On the other hand, people disagree with the opinion that they can already use the weekly allowance they do not have to pay too much attention because they use it all the time they have a problem with the weekly money they spend money every day on what they need this creates a great deal of skill in them and prevents them from having problems. From what seem up the reasons some persons believe that kids who are given pocket money when they become person of mature age.
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each individual trust that
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pocket
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every week have
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controling
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when they become adults.

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children
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money
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so
well they
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come
to realize how much work it takes to do this over time. And they learn how to distribute the
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money
properly
.
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, their parents
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help
them with this. And over the time,
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children
manage
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money
by following the example of how they spent it the second reason why I
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agree
as a result
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children
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own
their
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own
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in the bank and you
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they are already making independent
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money
and adopting to spending it on their
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,
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people
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use
the weekly allowance they do not
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have to
pay too much attention
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because
they
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use
it all the time they have a problem with the weekly
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money
they spend
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money
every day on what they need this creates a great deal of
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skill
in them and
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prevents
them from having problems.

From what seem up the reasons
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some
persons believe that kids who are
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given
pocket
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money
when they become person of mature age.
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IELTS essay Some each individual trust that children who are provided pocket money every week have less problems controling money when they become adults.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
216 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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