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Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. 5MqA
I totally belive in spending necessary amount of money in training individuals at international sports. Although, there is always some general public needs which should be fullfilled. These individuals are being prepared to represent our country at international level and being good at it will make our country proud. These international sports envents also help goverment create good relations with other countries. These sports events are also the good source of revenues for some TV channels as it will have more amount of audience if the soprts individual from our country has good probability of winning the game. Also, this will encourage many young people to stay fit and inspire them to be a sports person and join the training academy. This means that more and more sorts enthusiastic can establist their training centres to train this young talent of our country. Let's consider cricket as an example, it is the sport with the highest number of audience in the country this has helped many bussiness generate more revenue. Not just that, the cricket association of India known as BCCI is one of the richest association of cricket in the world. Today in India every state has it own associate for talent scounting. Back in 2007, India started its own cricket league which is being played every year in india only but the players from many other countries can also participate. This has created a constant and viable source of income for the local players who could'nt make it to the top 11. Spending necessary amount of money on training sports indivisual is really important as this will help goverment create better relations with other countries, generate new sources of revenue and make our country look proud.
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belive
in spending necessary amount of money in
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training
individuals at international
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sports
.
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, there is always
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some
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general public
needs which should be
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fullfilled
.

These individuals are
being prepared
to represent our
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country
at international level and being
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good
at it will
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make
our
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country
proud. These international
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sports
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envents
also
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help
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goverment
create
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good
relations with other countries.

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These
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sports
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events
are
also
the
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good
source of revenues for
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some
TV channels as it will have more amount of audience if the
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soprts
individual from our
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country
has
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good
probability of winning the game.
Also
, this will encourage
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many
young
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people
to stay fit and inspire them to be a
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sports
person and
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join
the
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training
academy. This means that more and more sorts enthusiastic can
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establist
their
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training
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centres
to train this young talent of our country.

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Let
's consider
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cricket
as an example, it is the
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sport
with the highest number of audience in the
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country
this has
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helped
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many
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bussiness
generate more revenue. Not
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just
that, the
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cricket
association of India known as
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BCCI
is one of the richest association of
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cricket
in the world.
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Today
in India every state has it
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own
associate for
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talent scounting
. Back in 2007, India
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started
its
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own
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cricket
league which is
being played
every year in
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india
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only
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but
the players from
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other
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countries
can
also
participate. This has created a constant and viable source of income for the local players who
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could'nt
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make
it to the top 11.

Spending necessary amount of money on
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training
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sports
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indivisual
is
really
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important
as this will
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help
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goverment
create better relations with other
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countries
, generate new sources of revenue and
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make
our
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country
look proud.
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IELTS essay Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead.

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