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Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some governments spend a lot of funds training individuals to be successful in sporting events, but a few of the people believe that this money should be spent on things that benefit general public however, to a large extent I disagree with the opinion of people that this money should be spent on something else. Firstly, the essay will talk about the benefits of sports taking into account the historical perspective, secondly it will elucidate with the relevant examples addressing the concern of people.
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IELTS essay Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
84 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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