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Some governments say how many children a family can hare in their country. They may control the number of children someone has through taxes. It is sometimes a necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way.

Some governments say how many children a family can hare in their country. They may control the number of children someone has through taxes. It is sometimes a necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way. 9M03
In today's world population is increasing day by day. Over population is lead an economic issue that each nation are facing right now. Individual country takes some step to control size of families. Developing countries have to fight more with this issue compare to develop nations. It is necessary to control the number of children with good suggestion. To begin with, in developing country most of people are lives in village. Rural people are not much educated so they don't know about control size of families. First to give them knowledge this issue and this impact on economics. Government has make some rules for to control population. For example - If anyone have only two children then they should received benefit like medical facilities, education scholarship and development money. But not control through taxes, its gives bad impact on society and low salaries people. Government should do this wisely and cleverly. Furthermore in urban area people can understand about rising population and they make contribute to control this problem with their best efforts. However in urban city also have some people who doesn't care about population problem and they give negative thought. Some Developed countries have already overcome with this points. On the other hand, government have to take few healthy steps and it's their right. Giving them awareness about this serious issue and represents with new idea. If they control their family plan after one or two children then they save society by poverty. It's wonderful way to control population. In conclusion, I agree with government of a country should take some necessary initiative to control population. But tax imposing on people is not a good solution and there are many alternative step.
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is increasing day by day. Over
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population
is lead an economic
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issue
that each nation are facing right
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now
. Individual
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takes
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step to
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control
size of families. Developing
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countries
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have to
fight more with this
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issue
compare to develop nations. It is necessary to
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control
the number of children with
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good
suggestion. To
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most of
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people
are
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lives
in village. Rural
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people
are not much educated
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so
they don't know about
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control
size of families.
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issue
and this impact on economics.
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Government
has
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make
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some
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rules
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control
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population
.
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have
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only
two children then they should
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received
benefit like medical facilities, education scholarship and development money.
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not
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control
through taxes, its gives
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bad
impact on society and low salaries
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people
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Government
should do this
wisely
and
cleverly
.
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in urban area
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people
can understand about rising
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population and
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contribute to
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control
this problem with their best efforts.
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also
have
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people
who
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population
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problem and
they give
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negative
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Developed
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countries
have already overcome with
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government
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have to
take few healthy steps and it's their right. Giving them awareness about this serious
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issue
and represents with new
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. If they
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control
their family plan after one or two children then they save society by poverty. It's
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wonderful
way to
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control
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population
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government
of a
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country
should take
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some
necessary initiative to
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control
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population
.
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But
tax imposing on
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people
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is
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good
solution and there are
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alternative
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IELTS essay Some governments say how many children a family can hare in their country. They may control the number of children someone has through taxes. It is sometimes a necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way.

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