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Some feel governments, rather than private companies, should be in charge of medical services. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is stated by certain individuals that healthcare facilities should be control by authority. Despite of private organisations. I largely agree with given notion that lawmakers ought to charge of medical service. At the very outset, the predominant reason why government should run the medical service instead of profit making companies, as in government hospitals the medical treatment is free as compared to private hospital in which huge amount of money utilize in treatment of individuals. Due to this, those mankind who are in poverty line and they cannot afford expensive treatment and medicine they suffered alot and face difficultly to get praiseworthy treatment. To cite an example, a survey was conducted by the government of the UK in 2019, which found that 65 percent people leads to dead. Because, they did not get efficient treatment due to lack of money. It is proved that government should best regards medical services rather than private firms Moving further, another excellent reason is, authority provides numerous amenities to public in government hospitals as they furnish body test and scan that done by only expensive machines. For instance, MRI, CT scan, which cost alot and in private companies charge huge money for testing that some people cannot afford. When government give facility of body testing and scanning it assist the needy people to get good medical services. As a result, it is better to medical service run by government. To sum up, I would like to establish that although, private corporations only run the medical service to gain profit. Yet, government aid those mankind who are poor and cannot afford expensive treatment by providing them free of cost facilities of medical. So, it is excellent if the medical service run by authority.
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by certain individuals that healthcare facilities should be control by authority.
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notion that lawmakers ought to charge of
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medical
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service
. At the
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outset, the predominant reason why
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government
should
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run
the
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medical
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service
instead
of profit making
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companies
, as in
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government
hospitals the
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medical
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treatment
is free as compared to
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private
hospital in which huge amount of money utilize in
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treatment
of individuals. Due to this,
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those mankind
who are in poverty
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line and
they cannot afford expensive
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treatment
and medicine they suffered
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alot
and face
difficultly
to
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get
praiseworthy
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treatment
. To cite an example, a survey
was conducted
by the
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government
of the UK in 2019, which found that 65 percent
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people
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leads
to dead.
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Because
, they did not
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get
efficient
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treatment
due to lack of money. It
is proved
that
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government
should best regards
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medical
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services
rather
than
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private
firms Moving
further
, another excellent reason is, authority provides numerous amenities to public in
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government
hospitals as they furnish body
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test
and scan that done by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
expensive machines.
For instance
, MRI, CT scan, which cost
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alot
and in
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private
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companies
charge huge money for testing that
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some
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people
cannot afford. When
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government
give facility of body testing and scanning it assist the needy
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people
to
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get
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good
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medical
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services
.
As a result
, it is better to
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medical
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service
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run
by
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government
. To sum up, I would like to establish that although,
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private
corporations
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only
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run
the
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medical
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service
to gain profit.
Yet
,
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government
aid
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those mankind
who are poor and cannot afford expensive
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treatment
by providing them free of cost facilities of
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medical
.
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So
, it is excellent if the
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medical
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service
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run
by authority.
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IELTS essay Some feel governments, rather than private companies, should be in charge of medical services.

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