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Some educators believe that international school exchange visits are important for teenage children. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Some educators believe that international school exchange visits are important for teenage children. bDabW
That senior and higher secondary students stand to gain by experiencing schooling in a different country is the opinion of a number of pedagogics. In today’s world of increased mobility across not only nations but even continents I am inclined to favour this belief. It is often said that the world is shrinking though not in the literal sense but arguably so in the figurative. This is because education, business, employment and even tourism are throwing people in to a cultural melting pot on an ever-growing basis. Learning early about differences across cultures and political borders will stand one in good stead in the long run. To begin with, learning a hitherto alien culture opens up the teen mind to an acceptance of doing things differently. Further, this develops an understanding and tolerance for a set of values divergent from the only ones that existed in the adolescent psyche. Thirdly sharing learnings and experiences leads to a mutual betterment in various facets of life. Lastly, in-person interactions have many more dimensions and a lot more give and take. Though a lot can be gleaned from reading, print or online, or from watching television, these are one-way communications thus limiting their possible benefits. That said, each human being is unique and may have a different reaction to the same stimuli. An introvert may feel retract further in to his shell if he feels threatened in the presence of, what to him are, strange people. Another aspect that needs attention is that teenaged minds are still malleable and not fully mature. A misunderstanding with an unfamiliar set of persons could led to a negative experience that may permanently scar a still raw psyche.
That senior and higher secondary students stand to gain by experiencing schooling in a
different
country is the opinion of a number of
pedagogics
. In
today
’s world of increased mobility across not
only
nations
but
even continents I
am inclined
to
favour
this belief.

It is
often
said that the world is shrinking though not in the literal sense
but
arguably
so
in the figurative. This is
because
education, business, employment and even tourism are throwing
people
in to a cultural melting pot on an ever-growing basis. Learning early about differences across cultures and political borders will stand one in
good
stead in the long run.

To
begin
with, learning a hitherto alien culture opens up the teen mind to an acceptance of doing things
differently
.
Further
, this develops an understanding and tolerance for a set of values divergent from the
only
ones that existed in the adolescent psyche.
Thirdly
sharing learnings and experiences leads to a mutual betterment in various facets of life.
Lastly
, in-person interactions have
many
more dimensions and a lot more give and take. Though a lot can
be gleaned
from reading, print or online, or from watching television, these are one-way communications
thus
limiting their possible benefits.

That said, each human being is unique and may have a
different
reaction to the same stimuli. An introvert may feel retract
further
in to his shell if he feels threatened in the presence of, what to him are, strange
people
. Another aspect that needs attention is that
teenaged
minds are
still
malleable and not
fully
mature. A misunderstanding with an unfamiliar set of persons could
led
to a
negative
experience that may
permanently
scar a
still
raw psyche.
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IELTS essay Some educators believe that international school exchange visits are important for teenage children.

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