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Some disadvantages about unbelieved information sourses

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Nowadays, technology has become a vital part of human life. However, there are some drawbacks as its benefits; unreliable information sources is one of the biggest problems which need to be solved. Disturbing social media, talking indiscriminately and different forms of vulgarities are three main reasons to prove its endangerment. First of all, disturbing social media causes a huge bad consequence. Normally, before knowing the fact, people tend to believe in any information which appears on social media. Moreover, because of the rapid spread of social networks, individuals make it complicated; therefore, not only make people panic but also no longer believe in local government. In addition, several people entice others for fame, profit. For instance, as the progressively expansion of the Covid19, a small part of the citizens whose statuses provide non-realistic figures about the victims. By sanctifying their fake sanctified products that cause a majority of selling low-quality crimes. Secondly, talking indiscriminately is taboo. Because of indiscriminate and thoughtless statements that it has affected many people's personal lives. These kinds of acts are being condemned on everyday news. To begin with, sensitive people will be easily influenced by words, negative habits; in consequence, it can lead them to depression and thoughts of death. For example, we can see Korean idols who have suffered a lot of fake rumors, touch to invasion of privacy purpose to mess up the fan community. People who are affected by bad behavior can lead to some serious mental problems, become aggressive and irritable. At least but nevertheless, exposing to different forms of vulgarities definitely affects spiritual life. Nowadays, we can see lots of comments on social media having many exposes to different forms of vulgarities. Due to the fact, there are some excuses for being rude such as swearing which is the most common way to express true feelings. An enormous amount of bad comments are often written by teenagers and young kids. The cause of this is their parents don't fully take care of their children. In addition, kids can access to numerous unacceptable links, websites; therefore, children's development has been disturbed. In conclusion, we can not deny that technology has played an important role for its help. On the other hand, there are somes matters that humans must recognize and deal with.
Nowadays, technology has become a vital part of human life.
However
, there are
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some
drawbacks as its benefits; unreliable information sources is one of the biggest problems which need to
be solved
. Disturbing
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social
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media
, talking
indiscriminately
and
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different
forms of vulgarities are three main reasons to prove its endangerment.

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, disturbing
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social
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media
causes a huge
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bad
consequence.
Normally
,
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before
knowing the fact,
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people
tend to believe in any information which appears on
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social
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media
.
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,
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because
of the rapid spread of
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social
networks, individuals
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make
it complicated;
therefore
, not
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only
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make
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people
panic
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but
also
no longer believe in local
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government
.
In addition
, several
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people
entice others for fame, profit.
For instance
, as the
progressively
expansion of the
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Covid19
, a
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part of the citizens whose statuses provide non-realistic figures about the victims. By sanctifying their fake sanctified products that cause a majority of selling low-quality crimes.

Secondly
, talking
indiscriminately
is taboo.
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of indiscriminate and thoughtless statements that it has
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affected
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many
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people
's personal
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lives
. These kinds of acts are
being condemned
on everyday news. To
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begin
with, sensitive
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people
will be
easily
influenced by words,
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negative
habits; in consequence, it can lead them to depression and thoughts of death.
For example
, we can
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see
Korean idols who have suffered
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a lot of
fake rumors, touch to invasion of privacy purpose to mess up the fan community.
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People
who are
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affected
by
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bad
behavior can lead to
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some
serious mental problems, become aggressive and irritable.

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nevertheless
, exposing to
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different
forms of vulgarities definitely affects spiritual life. Nowadays, we can
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see
lots of comments on
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social
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media
having
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many
exposes to
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different
forms of vulgarities. Due to the fact, there are
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some
excuses for being rude such as swearing which is the most common way to express true feelings. An enormous amount of
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bad
comments are
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often
written by
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teenagers
and young kids. The cause of this is their parents don't
fully
take care of their children.
In addition
, kids can access to numerous unacceptable links, websites;
therefore
, children's development has
been disturbed
.

In conclusion
, we can not deny that technology has played an
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important
role for its
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help
.
On the other hand
, there are
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matters that humans
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must
recognize and deal with.
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IELTS essay Some disadvantages about unbelieved information sourses

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