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Some countries spend a lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. Why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion? v.1

Some countries spend a lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. Why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion? v. 1
It is true that the traffic jam has become a serious problem in many countries, and with each passing day, this problem is becoming more and more dangerous in almost all the regions of the world. Therefore, I strongly believed that the use of bicycles instead of heavy vehicles is the best solution to avoid traffic jams. (57) We had seen in the past that people mostly used horses and donkeys for travelling and transportation from one place to another until the invention of the wheel in the 19th century. Thus, the smooth flow of traffic was not a big problem in many countries in the past. (47) Presently, the traffic jam is a matter of serious attention for the entire world. Nowadays, many countries are trying their best to find the solutions of traffic jams. In many parts of the world, governments are promoting bicycle usage. This is because of several reasons like bicycles did not consume any fuel. They are much cheaper than any other vehicle, and they are also an environmentally friendly mean of transportation. In addition, bicycles also help people to stay active and healthy. (80) The recent development in science and technology has enabled the countries to design modern road structures in order to ensure the steady flow of traffic. Thus, if the focus of countries remained on the promotion of bicycle usage, then the world will surely get rid of traffic jams in the near future. (52) Hence, the use of bicycles is one of the most suitable mean of transportation as it not only allows the traffic to move smoothly by cutting down the space on the roads but also minimize air pollution. (37)
It is true that the
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traffic
jam has become a serious problem in
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many
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countries
, and with each passing day, this problem is becoming more and more
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dangerous
in almost all the regions of the
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world
.
Therefore
, I
strongly
believed that the
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use
of
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bicycles
instead
of heavy vehicles is the best solution to avoid
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traffic
jams. (57)

We had
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seen
in the past that
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people
mostly
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used
horses and donkeys for travelling and transportation from one place to another until the invention of the wheel in the 19th century.
Thus
, the smooth flow of
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traffic
was not a
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big
problem in
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many
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countries
in the past. (47)

Presently
, the
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traffic
jam is a matter of serious attention for the entire
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world
. Nowadays,
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many
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countries
are trying their best to find the solutions of
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traffic
jams. In
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many
parts of the
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world
,
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governments
are promoting
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bicycle
usage. This is
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because
of several reasons like
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bicycles
did not consume any fuel. They are much cheaper than any other vehicle, and they are
also
an
environmentally
friendly mean of transportation.
In addition
,
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bicycles
also
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help
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people
to stay active and healthy. (80)

The recent development in science and technology has enabled the
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countries
to design modern road structures in order to ensure the steady flow of
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traffic
.
Thus
, if the focus of
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countries
remained on the promotion of
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bicycle
usage, then the
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world
will
surely
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get
rid of
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traffic
jams in the near future. (52)

Hence
, the
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use
of
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bicycles
is one of the most suitable mean of transportation as it not
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only
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allows
the
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traffic
to
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move
smoothly
by cutting down the space on the roads
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but
also
minimize air pollution. (37)
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some countries spend a lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. Why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
280 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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