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Some countries spend a lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. Why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion? v.4

Some countries spend a lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. Why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion? v. 4
Immensely increasing pollutions is concern nowadays. In order to overcome this phenomenon, developing countries are trying to put a tremendous amount of money in spreading awareness among the people for usages of the bicycles. This essay will attempt in order to agree with the statement that it is a considerably inevitable solution. As it is widely accepted that, non-renewable sources of energy are at extinction, such as, fossil fuel. One should consider alternative options. As mentioned before, by hiking use of bicycles it becomes easier to resolve this. Developing countries are spending a handsome money for explaining about the advantages of the no fuel needed vehicles to the community. The reason behind this is to develop a clear breathable environment and reduce harmful chemicals and gases like Carbon monoxide. It also helps to improve health of people and less expenditure on medical supplies. Moreover, it should lead to resolve the one of the most important traffic problems. It has been proved that, countries accessing bicycles and other alternative travel options are having the minimum air pollution. The best illustration of this is USA country, people use chargeable bicycles to go to and from work to avoid traffic. In addition, it has claimed people who use the bicycle have more immunity and physical health. To conclude, it can be said that, to improve health and also get benefit from fresh environment one should consider the option of suing bicycles which can reduce traffic problems as well.
Immensely
increasing pollutions is concern nowadays. In order to overcome this phenomenon, developing
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countries
are trying to put a tremendous amount of money in spreading awareness among the
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people
for usages of the
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bicycles
. This essay will attempt in order to
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agree
with the statement that it is a
considerably
inevitable solution.

As it is
widely
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accepted
that, non-renewable sources of energy are at extinction, such as, fossil fuel. One should consider alternative options. As mentioned
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before
, by hiking
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use
of
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bicycles
it becomes easier to resolve this. Developing
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countries
are spending
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a handsome money
for explaining about the advantages of the no fuel needed vehicles to the community. The reason behind this is to develop a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
breathable environment and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
harmful chemicals and gases like Carbon monoxide. It
also
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helps
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
health of
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people
and less expenditure on medical supplies.
Moreover
, it should lead to resolve the one of the most
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important
traffic problems.

It has
been proved
that,
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countries
accessing
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bicycles
and other alternative travel options are having the minimum air pollution. The best illustration of this is USA
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country
,
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people
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use
chargeable
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bicycles
to go to and from work to avoid traffic.
In addition
, it has claimed
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people
who
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use
the
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bicycle
have more immunity and physical health.

To conclude
, it can
be said
that, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
health and
also
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get
benefit from fresh environment one should consider the option of suing
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bicycles
which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
traffic problems
as well
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some countries spend a lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. Why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
245 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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