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Some claim that studying abroad has greater benefits for a student's home country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some claim that studying abroad has greater benefits for a student's home country. 7pNG5
In this globalized world, an array of people believe that students who study internationally can benefit their home country to a great extent. I completely agree with the notion as it gives more knowledge and future aspects in real-life work. I will explain my perspective in the forthcoming paragraphs. To begin with, the truth that cannot be denied is that not every other country is equipped with state-of-the-art educational services. Hence, they are unable to meet the standards of the global educational system. A lot of learners acquire higher education in developed nations because their native educational institutions may not be fully equipped to support their chosen career field. For instance, underdeveloped nations are not backed up enough to teach advanced functionalities to those who wish to pursue their careers in the field of architecture, engineering, medical, and more. Hence, students prefer going to such countries that have a more promising educational infrastructure. By stepping into other countries to seek higher education, students learn according to the international standards. The new techniques and strategies learnt during their courses can be implemented into their own nations to raise the standards higher and meet the expectations of the future generations. Furthermore, by visiting another country to gain education, students get to improve their understanding of different cultures. By entering into a new environment, they will meet new people from varying nations, cultures and ethnicities. This will take their conversations on a different route and will help develop more confidence. This opens up doors to newer ideas and plans that they can integrate into their native homes to take it up a notch. Although it is true that students preferring other countries can leave their own behind, the knowledge and skills that they acquire is superior. In conclusion, getting an education in a foreign nation can be helpful for the native country as it opens up doors to improvements and better educational infrastructure as well as services. Hence, students always have a win-win situation
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people
believe that
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students
who study
internationally
can

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benefit
their home
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country
to a great extent. I completely
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agree
with the notion as it gives
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more


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knowledge
and future aspects in real-life work. I will
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explain
my perspective in the
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forthcoming


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paragraphs
.

To
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begin
with, the truth that cannot
be denied
is that not every other
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country
is equipped
with

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state-of-the-art
educational services.
Hence
, they are unable to
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meet
the standards of the global

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educational
system.
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learners acquire higher
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education
in developed
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nations
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because
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their


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native
educational institutions may not be
fully
equipped to support their chosen career field.

For instance
, underdeveloped
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nations
are not backed up
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enough
to teach advanced

functionalities to those who wish to pursue their careers in the field of architecture, engineering,

medical, and more.
Hence
,
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students
prefer going to such
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countries
that have a more promising

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educational
infrastructure. By stepping into other
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countries
to seek higher
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education
,
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students


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learn
according to the international standards. The new techniques and strategies
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learnt
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during


their courses can
be implemented
into their
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own
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nations
to raise the standards higher and
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meet


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the
expectations of the future generations.

Furthermore
, by visiting another
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country
to gain
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education
,
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students
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get
to
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improve
their

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understanding
of
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different
cultures. By entering into a new environment, they will
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meet
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new


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people
from varying
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nations
, cultures and ethnicities. This will take their conversations on
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a


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different
route and will
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help
develop more confidence. This opens up doors to newer
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ideas
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and


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plans
that they can integrate into their native homes to take it up a notch.

Although it is true that
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students
preferring other
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countries
can
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leave
their
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own
behind, the

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knowledge
and
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skills
that they acquire is superior.

In conclusion
, getting an
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education
in a foreign
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nation
can be helpful for the native
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country
as it

opens up doors to improvements and better educational infrastructure
as well
as

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services
.
Hence
,
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students
always have a win-win situation

IELTS essay Some claim that studying abroad has greater benefits for a student's home country.

Essay
  American English
25 paragraphs
330 words
5.0
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