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Some believe that technology is increasing the gap between rich and poor people, while others think that it has opposite effects. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Some believe that technology is increasing the gap between rich and poor people, while others think that it has opposite effects. eEKLx
The rapid development of technology has gone a long way towards improving humanity’s living standard. Beneficiaries of modern technology have always been controversial. Despite the increased life quality, some argues that technology has created unusual gaps among the social hierarchy while others reject this notion. Although the latter view is justifiable to a certain extent, I lean towards the former. On the one hand, technology plays an important role in abridging the gap between the prosperous and the needy. Gaining access over the internet has created great opportunities for poor people to obtain similar levels of education to the rich ones. Poor students, who are not capable of affording multiple tuition fees, can study by themselves through the internet. Besides, by breaking the geographical barrier, online courses, contributes to help unlucky children develop their abilities and have bright future. On the other hand, expensive modern gadgets has become unaffordable for destitute people, and thus, increasing the distance between the poor and the rich. While the rich benefits from advanced treatments such as implanting special protein which costs only a small portion of their income, such treatments seem overwhelming to the poor. The wealthy residents’ living standard, thereby, has witnessed significant improvements, whereas low-income citizens are still struggling to remain healthy due to the unaffordable medical fees. Moreover, as technical development for vehicles grow better overtime, there has been also an increase in prices, making convenient transportations out of the poor’s reach. Instead of spending an hour commuting to work by bike, the higher class can save their travel time to other important task when driving car, which make them more productive than the lower class. In conclusion, although technology benegited humanity by provinding widespread information on the internet, it has increase the gap between the prosperous and the needy due to its exhorbitant price.
The rapid development of
technology
has gone a long way towards improving humanity’s living standard. Beneficiaries of modern
technology
have always been controversial. Despite the increased life quality,
some
argues that
technology
has created unusual gaps among the social hierarchy while others reject this notion. Although the latter view is justifiable to a certain extent, I lean towards the former.

On the one hand,
technology
plays an
important
role in abridging the gap between the prosperous and the needy. Gaining access over the internet has created great opportunities for
poor
people
to obtain similar levels of education to the rich ones.
Poor
students, who are not capable of affording multiple tuition fees, can study by themselves through the internet.
Besides
, by breaking the geographical barrier, online courses, contributes to
help
unlucky children develop their abilities and have bright future.

On the other hand
, expensive modern gadgets has become unaffordable for destitute
people
, and
thus
, increasing the distance between the
poor
and the rich. While the rich benefits from advanced treatments such as implanting special protein which costs
only
a
small
portion of their income, such treatments seem overwhelming to the
poor
. The wealthy residents’ living standard, thereby, has witnessed significant improvements, whereas low-income citizens are
still
struggling to remain healthy due to the unaffordable medical fees.
Moreover
, as technical development for vehicles grow better overtime, there has been
also
an increase in prices, making convenient transportations out of the
poor’s
reach.
Instead
of spending an hour commuting to work by bike, the higher
class
can save their travel time to other
important
task when driving car, which
make
them more productive than the lower
class
.

In conclusion
, although
technology
benegited
humanity by
provinding
widespread information on the internet, it has increase the gap between the prosperous and the needy due to its
exhorbitant
price.
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IELTS essay Some believe that technology is increasing the gap between rich and poor people, while others think that it has opposite effects.

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