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It is thought that, helping community without any monetary gains should be a compulsory activity to be performed by high school students. It can be any kind of work towards like community like, charity or being as mentors to junior students. I completely agree with this thought. Students are the future of a nation and they are the ones who have the responsibility of working for the betterment of not only the nation but towards humanity. School activities of helping the local community would result in children to developing social responsibilities. For example, if they are engaged with the activities like cleaning the localities on weekends, feeding and helping homeless people, feeding stray dogs as a part of school curriculum, they would of be a sense of humanity right form a young age. Seniors in schools can help young teenagers with sports activities as they would act as guides for them and this would have a couple of advantages, the first one being that, the juniors would have a better guidance towards the sport they are playing and the latter being that the seniors would learn how to act as leaders. For example, a captain of a school cricket team would guide his new team mates and when they perform well he would be considered as a role model by them. To conclude, it can be said that community service activities on a regular basis in secondary schools would be helpful to shape the behaviour and nature of young minds which in turn will be beneficial in making them better adults.

It is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonedassumedbelievedconsidered
thought
 that, helping You use this word too often, consider replacing it withneighborhoodcenterdistrictpeoplecompanynation
community
 without any monetary gains should be a compulsory You use this word too often, consider replacing it withactionlifeenterpriseexercisemovement
activity
 to be performed
 by high You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
school
 students. It can be any kind of work towards like You use this word too often, consider replacing it withneighborhoodcenterdistrictpeoplecompanynation
community
 like, charity or being as mentors to junior students. I completely This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 with this This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonedassumedbelievedconsidered
thought
.

Students are the future of a Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).nation, and
nation and
 they are the ones who have the responsibility of working for the betterment of not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 the nation This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 towards humanity. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
School
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withactionlifeenterpriseexercisemovement
activities
 of helping the local You use this word too often, consider replacing it withneighborhoodcenterdistrictpeoplecompanynation
community
 would result in children to developing social responsibilities. For example
, if they are engaged
 with the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withactionlifeenterpriseexercisemovement
activities
 like cleaning the localities on weekends, feeding and helping homeless This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
, feeding stray dogs as a part of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
school
 curriculum, they would Did you mean “have”? (‘would of’ is probably an incorrect use of the verb phrase ‘would have’; as contraction “would’ve” sounds like “could of”)have
of
 be a sense of humanity right form a young age.

Seniors in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
schools
 can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 young This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenilesadolescents
teenagers
 with sports You use this word too often, consider replacing it withactionlifeenterpriseexercisemovement
activities
 as they would act as guides for them and this would have a couple of advantages, the first
 one being that, the juniors would have a better guidance towards the sport they are playing and the latter being that the seniors would learn how to act as leaders. For example
, a captain of a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
school
 cricket team would guide his new The noun “teammates” is spelled as one word.teammates
team mates
 and when they perform well he would be considered
 as a role model by them.

To conclude
, it can be said
 that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withneighborhoodcenterdistrictpeoplecompanynation
community
 service You use this word too often, consider replacing it withactionlifeenterpriseexercisemovement
activities
 on a regular basis in secondary You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
schools
 would be helpful to shape the Possible spelling mistake. ‘behaviour’ is British English.behavior
behaviour
 and nature of young minds which in turn will be beneficial in making them better adults. 