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Some believe that charitable organizations should help people no matter where they live. Others argue that charities should only help those living in the country where the charity is based. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some believe that charitable organizations should help people no matter where they live. Others argue that charities should only help those living in the country where the charity is based. 0AWxB
It is deemed by a section of society that the non-profit organization organizations should only extend aid to the local population instead of working with people of other nations; others, however, disagree and claim that geography should not be a factor in determining whether needy people get help or not. I believe that although it might seem difficult to run relief operations overseas, yet the institutions must try their best to help ease the pain of down-trodden populace irrespective of where they live. The view that charities should only help people living near them is bolstered by some reasons. The first argument that is made in this idea’s favor is that it is would be considerably easier for the charitable trusts to give a hand to the people in their own locality. The reason behind this view is, the country’s own organizations would be more sympathetic to the plights of the deprived as they would be aware of the context and the circumstances of their area much better than some international trust. Thus, they would be able to give personalized support rather than meaninglessly pouring money to a cause that they do not understand. Secondly, since the charity collects majority of the money from the philanthropists, companies or organizations in their vicinity, it only makes sense to return back to the same society which has given something to them. It is also understandable that in order to assert influence over the people of their country, those help givers may want to be promoted as such in the area only from where they will gain something, either in the form of money, reputation or goodwill. However, helping people overseas may harbor much more benefits to the charity, and to the country where it has its roots, I believe. The most conspicuous advantage is rise in profile of the source country. It is obvious that if an aid organization helps the plight stricken of other country, it will become famous, and the same will happen to its nation. This will also increase the sense of brotherhood and enhance the connections among various nations and their natives. Apart from this, not every nation healthy enough from fiscal perspectives, so the population of these nations may be left on their own. In these cases, only the NGO’s of financially sound areas are able to give provisions to the needy. For example, Africa is a country which has sought help from charities from around the world so that its people can lead a better life. In conclusion, I vehemently believe that due to some reasons, mostly money related, it is far better to provide aid without taking into account some man made boundaries.
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is deemed
by a section of society that the non-profit
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organization
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organizations
should
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only
extend aid to the local population
instead
of working with
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people
of other
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nations
; others,
however
, disagree and claim that geography should not be a factor in determining whether needy
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people
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get
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help
or not. I believe that although it might seem difficult to run relief operations overseas,
yet
the institutions
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must
try their best to
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help
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ease
the pain of down-trodden populace irrespective of where they
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live
.

The view that
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charities
should
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only
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help
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people
living near them
is bolstered
by
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some
reasons. The
first
argument that
is made
in this
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idea
’s favor is that it is would be
considerably
easier for the charitable trusts to give a hand to the
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people
in their
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own
locality.
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The
reason behind this view is, the
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country’s
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own
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organizations
would be more sympathetic to the plights of the deprived as they would be aware of the context and the circumstances of their area much better than
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some
international trust.
Thus
, they would be able to give personalized support
rather
than
meaninglessly
pouring
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money
to a cause that they do not understand.
Secondly
, since the
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charity
collects majority of the
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money
from the philanthropists,
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companies
or
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organizations
in their vicinity, it
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only
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makes
sense to
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return back
to the same society which has
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given
something to them. It is
also
understandable that in order to assert influence over the
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people
of their
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country
, those
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help
givers may want to
be promoted
as such in the area
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only
from where they will gain something, either in the form of
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money
, reputation or goodwill.

However
, helping
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people
overseas may harbor much more benefits to the
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charity
, and to the
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country
where it has its roots, I believe. The most conspicuous advantage is rise in profile of the source
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country
. It is obvious that if an aid
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organization
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helps
the plight stricken of other
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country
, it will become
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famous
, and the same will happen to its
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nation
. This will
also
increase the sense of brotherhood and enhance the connections among various
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nations
and their natives. Apart from this, not every
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nation
healthy
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enough
from fiscal perspectives,
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so
the population of these
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nations
may be
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left
on their
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own
. In these cases,
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only
the NGO’s of
financially
sound areas are able to give provisions to the needy.
For example
, Africa is a
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country
which has sought
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help
from
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charities
from around the world
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that its
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people
can lead a better life.

In conclusion
, I
vehemently
believe that due to
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some
reasons,
mostly
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money
related, it is far better to provide aid without taking into account
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
made boundaries.
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IELTS essay Some believe that charitable organizations should help people no matter where they live. Others argue that charities should only help those living in the country where the charity is based.

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