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I stumbled with this article written by the sister of Robert Kiyosaki – the famous rich dad poor dad author’s sister named Emi, a Buddhist nun that spent most of her religious services pleading with a near dead patients. There are three common things that most of her patients regret – The lack of appreciation to their love ones, not fulfilling their life goals, and lack of forgiveness.

I stumbled with this article written by the sister of Robert Kiyosaki – the famous rich dad poor dad author’s sister named Emi, a Buddhist nun that spent most of her religious services pleading with a near dead patients. There are three common things that most of her patients regret – The lack of appreciation to their love ones, not fulfilling their life goals, and lack of forgiveness. PV7yw
I stumbled with this article written by the sister of Robert Kiyosaki – the famous rich dad poor dad author’s sister named Emi, a Buddhist nun that spent most of her religious services pleading with a near dead patients. There are three common things that most of her patients regret – The lack of appreciation to their love ones, not fulfilling their life goals, and lack of forgiveness. Firstly, the lack of courage to say kind words to show their affection to their loved ones or even just show physical intimacy without a reason at all. Some would find these words or actions of affection awkward and cheesy. On the contrary, it would do positive outcome. As a result, the receiver would be appreciated, and fulfilled since they know they are reciprocated with their special someone. Thus, creates a stronger bond. For instance, a mother would cooks and cleans the house every day, and finds time to teach her young, and kiss them to sleep. Meanwhile, the father works 8 hours a day merely to provide food and shelter for his family, and still find a way to play with the kids. Furthermore, the children would say I love you, kiss and hug their parents in their special ways. Bottom line, showing one’s affection must be shown to their loved ones in numerous ways either gestures or words that would prevent having regrets latter in their lifetime. Secondly, not doing your passion in life. Having a goal is something that would fulfills life worth without one, life would be dull and boring. Being pre-occupied with matters that is not close to one’s goal creates hindrance to one’s happiness. For example, one aspire to be world’s traveler, but does not have time to spare due to conflicts with schedules and different priorities. Decades past that one’s realize that it is too late due to old age or the sickness consume them that they are not healthy enough to travel. The essence of not doing what makes you happy creates regret in the future. Thirdly, the act of forgiveness towards the people who one’s hurt. Being forgiving is not common trait for most of the people due to the gravity of the sins they committed against. For instance, the people who killed someone due to their evil desires. This is unacceptable in the eyes of people. Therefore, these devilish acts is to be condemned and let the justice serve itself. Others cannot tolerate being forgiving to the people who are murderers since their acts are in humane. As a result, people are consume with hatred that they cannot afford to be forgiving to the people who wronged them, but no one should be having grievance most of their life. At some point, one should forgive in order for one to lighten up the heavy burden their carry in their life. To sum it up, one can prevent having regrets in life by being appreciative, living the dream that one’s desire, and being forgiving. If one realize that life would be better if we perform this acts earlier in life, we can live life to the fullest without these baggage’s called regrets
I stumbled with this article written by the sister of Robert
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Kiyosaki
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the
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famous
rich dad poor dad author’s sister named
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Emi
, a Buddhist nun that spent most of her religious services pleading with a near dead
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patients
. There are three common things that most of her patients
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regret
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The lack of appreciation to their
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love
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ones
, not fulfilling their
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life
goals, and lack of forgiveness.

Firstly
, the lack of courage to say kind words to
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show
their affection to their
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loved
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ones
or even
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just
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show
physical intimacy without a reason at all.
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Some
would find these words or actions of affection awkward and cheesy.
On the contrary
, it would do
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positive
outcome.
As a result
, the receiver would
be appreciated
, and fulfilled since they know they
are reciprocated
with their special someone.
Thus
, creates a stronger bond.
For instance
, a mother would
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cooks
and cleans the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
every day, and finds time to teach her young, and kiss them to sleep. Meanwhile, the father works 8 hours a day
merely
to provide food and shelter for his family, and
still
find a way to play with the kids.
Furthermore
, the children would say I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
you, kiss and hug their parents in their special ways. Bottom line, showing one’s affection
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must
be shown
to their
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loved
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ones
in numerous ways either gestures or words that would
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prevent
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having
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regrets
latter in their lifetime.

Secondly
, not doing your passion in
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life
.
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Having
a goal is something that would
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fulfills
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life
worth without one,
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life
would be dull and boring. Being
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pre-occupied
with matters
that is
not close to one’s goal creates hindrance to one’s happiness.
For example
, one aspire to be world’s traveler,
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but
does not have time to spare
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due
to conflicts with schedules and
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different
priorities. Decades past that one’s realize that it is too late
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due
to
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old
age or the sickness consume them that they are not healthy
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enough
to travel. The essence of not doing what
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makes
you happy creates
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regret
in the future.

Thirdly
, the
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act
of forgiveness towards the
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people
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who one’s
hurt. Being
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forgiving
is not common trait for most of the
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people
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due
to the gravity of the sins they committed against.
For instance
, the
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people
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who
killed someone
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due
to their evil desires. This is unacceptable in the eyes of
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people
.
Therefore
, these devilish
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acts
is to
be condemned
and
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let
the justice serve itself. Others cannot tolerate being
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forgiving
to the
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people
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who
are murderers since their
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acts
are in humane.
As a result
,
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people
are consume with hatred that they cannot afford to be
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forgiving
to the
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people
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who
wronged them,
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but
no one should be
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having
grievance most of their
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life
. At
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some
point, one should forgive in order for one to lighten up the heavy burden their carry in their life.

To sum it up, one can
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prevent
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having
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regrets
in
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life
by being appreciative, living the dream that one’s desire, and being
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forgiving
. If one realize that
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life
would be better if we perform this
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acts
earlier in
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life
, we can
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live
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life
to the fullest without
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these baggage
’s called
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regrets
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IELTS essay I stumbled with this article written by the sister of Robert Kiyosaki – the famous rich dad poor dad author’s sister named Emi, a Buddhist nun that spent most of her religious services pleading with a near dead patients. There are three common things that most of her patients regret – The lack of appreciation to their love ones, not fulfilling their life goals, and lack of forgiveness.

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