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Some believe it is important for cities and towns to invest heavily in building large outdoor public spaces. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some believe it is important for cities and towns to invest heavily in building large outdoor public spaces. mGNN
There is no iota of doubt that cities and towns are supposed to invest a huge sum of money to construct a plethora of open public spaces. Considering their need in the present time, I strongly agree with the notion as outdoor parks are great places to socialize with people and spend quality time close to nature and enhance productivity. To begin with, In natural lawns, people with different thought processes and intellectual thinking can interact with each other smoothly and rise their recreational power. To explicate it, everyone has his own view about each situation in life that might be positive or negative. Moreover, the engagement of thoughtful individuals in a natural environment can generate numerously meaningful outcomes which all-together impacts society to a large extent. For example, OYO Rooms, the biggest online booking service came into existence when two neighbours get into a discussion on the morning walk, about how difficult is to reserve rooms in hotels in advance in India? While debating they discuss the plan to advance into the idea to set up OYO Rooms. As a result, the socializing of motivated intellectual people can draw excellent results for society. To commence with the need for open spaces in urban areas is to get people out of their busy life and motivate to spend some lavish time close to nature. To explain it, in metro cities and towns, the life of residents is in hurry always hustling bustling around the clock from one stop to another because of their heavily packed working schedule. To epitome, An employee working with Micromax starts his day around 6: 00 am in the morning and sitting on his desk by 9: 00 am to complete his daily routine tasks. Though he is working comfortably, his productivity somewhat lacks in certain aspects which the productivity survey reports of Micromax 2020 indicate with reason highlighting lack of concentration which is due to no physical and exciting activities that trigger the mind. Thus, these public grounds and parks near towns can help the people like former to take a bit of time out of their schedule and devote some time close to nature. To recapitulate, I strongly favour the investment to built larger open area lawns and parks in cities and towns to motivate people to socialize with others and also, made places for people close to near residents where they can spend some time in the lap of nature which eventually will enhance their productivity.
There is no iota of doubt that cities and
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towns
are supposed
to invest a huge sum of money to construct a plethora of open public spaces. Considering their need in the present
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time
, I
strongly
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agree
with the notion as outdoor parks are great places to socialize with
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people
and spend quality
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time
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close
to nature and enhance productivity.

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begin
with, In natural lawns,
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people
with
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different
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thought
processes and intellectual thinking can interact with each other
smoothly
and rise their recreational power. To explicate it, everyone has his
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own
view about each situation in life that might be
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positive
or
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negative
.
Moreover
, the engagement of thoughtful individuals in a natural environment can generate
numerously
meaningful outcomes which all-together impacts society to a large extent.
For example
,
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OYO
Rooms, the biggest online booking service came into existence when two
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neighbours
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get
into a discussion on the morning walk, about how difficult is to reserve rooms in hotels in advance in India?
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While
debating they discuss the plan to advance into the
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idea
to set up
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OYO
Rooms.
As a result
, the socializing of motivated intellectual
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people
can draw excellent results for society.

To commence with the need for open spaces in urban areas is to
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get
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people
out of their busy life and motivate to spend
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some
lavish
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time
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close
to nature. To
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explain
it, in metro cities and
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towns
, the life of residents is in hurry always hustling bustling around the clock from one
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stop
to another
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because
of their
heavily
packed working schedule.
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epitome, An employee working with
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Micromax
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starts
his day around 6: 00
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am in the morning
and sitting on his desk by 9: 00 am to complete his daily routine tasks. Though he is working
comfortably
, his productivity somewhat lacks in certain aspects which the productivity survey reports of
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Micromax
2020 indicate with reason highlighting lack of concentration which is due to no physical and exciting activities that trigger the mind.
Thus
, these public grounds and parks near
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towns
can
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help
the
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people
like former to take a bit of
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time
out of their schedule and devote
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some
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time
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close
to nature.

To recapitulate, I
strongly
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favour
the investment to built larger open area lawns and parks in cities and
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towns
to motivate
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people
to socialize with others and
also
, made places for
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people
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close
to near residents where they can spend
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some
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time
in the lap of nature which
eventually
will enhance their productivity.
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IELTS essay Some believe it is important for cities and towns to invest heavily in building large outdoor public spaces.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
413 words
6.0
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