Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Som parents buy their children whatever they ask for and allow them children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?

Undoubtedly, in the present scenario parents are fulfilling the desires of their children as compared to past and giving them fully freedom, let them do whatever they want as well. This essay will delve some consequences of it in upcoming paragraphs and in my opinion, it is not a good parenting style and it can have some negative points too. To commence with, all the wishes and allowing to do things without any permission is not an appropriate way to raise children. Nowadays, parents give their children money then they do whatever they want without any hesitation. Children believe that earning money is not a difficult process and they do not think about hard work of their parents behind it. Moreover, kids are indulging in illegal activities because of their parents are giving them fully freedom. This is because they are not able to differentiate between right and wrong things. Furthermore, it is the responsibility of the parents to guide them and correct their mistakes. For example, if children indulge in bad company in their school time lack of guidance of their parents so, they have to face serious problems when they become adults. Hence, children are doing bad activities due to lack of parents responsibilities. Additionally, the kids of benevolent parents sometimes are likely to grow up with bad habits. One of the major is that they disrespect the older people as well as they are unable to do work in tandom. If a person never live in any restriction, is likely to take wrong decisions as well. Moving further, it is important to say "no" to children when they misbehave or try to push their boundaries. This is the only way to help young people to regulate their desires and develop self control. In abridgement, as per my above confabulation it is axiomatic that although parents should help their kids to develop self control and respect to others, yet I deem that over permissive style should not be followed.
Undoubtedly
, in the present scenario
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
are fulfilling the desires of their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
as compared to past and giving them
fully
freedom,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
them do whatever they want
as well
. This essay will delve
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
consequences of it in upcoming paragraphs and in my opinion, it is not a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
parenting
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
style and
it can have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
points too. To commence with, all the wishes and allowing to do things without any permission is not an appropriate way to raise
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. Nowadays,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
give their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
money then they do whatever they want without any hesitation.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Children
believe that earning money is not a difficult
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
process and
they do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
about
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work of their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
behind it.
Moreover
, kids are indulging in illegal activities
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
are giving them
fully
freedom. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they are not able to differentiate between right and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
things.
Furthermore
, it is the responsibility of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
to guide them and correct their mistakes.
For example
, if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
indulge in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
in their school time lack of guidance of their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
face serious problems when they become adults.
Hence
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
are doing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
activities due to lack of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
responsibilities.
Additionally
, the kids of benevolent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
are likely to grow up with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
habits. One of the major is that they disrespect the older
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
as well
as they are unable to do work in
Possible spelling mistake found.
tandom
. If a person never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in any restriction, is likely to take
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
decisions
as well
. Moving
further
, it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to say
Use a smart opening quote here.
"
no
Use a smart closing quote here.
"
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
when they misbehave or try to push their boundaries. This is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to regulate their desires and develop
This word is normally spelled with a hyphen.
self control
.

In
Possible spelling mistake found.
abridgement
, as per my above confabulation it is axiomatic that although
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
their kids to develop
This word is normally spelled with a hyphen.
self control
and respect to others,
yet
I deem that over permissive style should not
be followed
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Som parents buy their children whatever they ask for and allow them children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
331 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts