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Society is based on rules and laws. If individuals were free to do whatever they want to do, it could not function. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

Society is based on rules and laws. If individuals were free to do whatever they want to do, it could not function. with the above statement? jA5d
Laws refer to the rules imposed on human beings. Some people hold that laws play an important role in regulating our behavior and make this world better. From my point of view, I agree that a country can maintain order by-laws and rules. First of all, if people obey rules, our country not only can be in order but also embrace more opportunities for economic development. Take selling fake products as a case, if those who sell fake goods are not punished, consumers would be afraid of buying stuff, which means the buying power of a country probably gets influenced. Another example shows that laws are indispensable can be about traffic conditions. As long as all the drivers and pedestrians follow the rules, then the occurrence rate of traffic accidents and congestion of traffic can decrease more than before. We all wish to live in a peaceful and closely-knit society. However, human beings are creatures born with passion. We may do something harmful to others when we are angry or because of self-interest. For instance, some businessmen are motivated by profit to do bribery, or even kill their rivals. For this kind of situation, laws are of significance to make this world safer. From what we discussed above, it's reasonable to conclude that laws and rules are essential to operate the world well. Even though laws do not allow people to act at will, the main purpose of it is to create a society where people live in harmony.
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refer to the
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imposed on human beings.
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hold that
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play an
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important
role in regulating our behavior and
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make
this world better. From my point of view, I
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agree
that a country can maintain order by-laws and
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rules
.

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First of all
, if
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people
obey
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, our country not
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can be in order
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but
also
embrace more opportunities for economic development. Take selling fake products as a case, if those who sell fake
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goods
are not punished, consumers would be afraid of buying stuff, which means the buying power of a country
probably
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gets
influenced. Another example
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shows
that
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laws
are indispensable can be about traffic conditions. As long as all the drivers and pedestrians follow the
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rules
, then the occurrence rate of traffic accidents and congestion of traffic can decrease more than
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before
.

We all wish to
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live
in a peaceful and
closely
-knit society.
However
, human beings are creatures born with passion. We may do something harmful to others when we are angry or
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because
of self-interest.
For instance
,
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some
businessmen
are motivated
by profit to do bribery, or even kill their rivals. For this kind of situation,
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laws
are of significance to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
this world safer.

From what we discussed above, it's reasonable
to conclude
that
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laws
and
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rules
are essential to operate the world well.
Even though
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laws
do not
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allow
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people
to act at will, the main purpose of it is to create a society where
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in harmony.
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IELTS essay Society is based on rules and laws. If individuals were free to do whatever they want to do, it could not function. with the above statement?

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