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society is based on rules and laws it could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do to what extent do you agree or disagree?

society is based on rules and laws it could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do 9yo0
Community directly depends on regulations and constitutions. it would not work if people have free access to do things whatever they do. I completely agree with the notion because it will increase dangerous things like crime, inflation and so on, the reasons will be elaborated in the upcoming paragraphs. To begin with, there are irrefutable arguments in the favour of my stance. The most conspicuous one is increasing in crime and terrorism in the country. Offenders are not going to get punishments for the mistakes they did and they become monsters because of no government. As a result, the crime rate grows because they need money. it directly impacts the country future. Another pivotal point is unemployment among poor and middle-class families. In other words, individuals cannot get a job because rich people rule the nation and they try to improve their wealth without thinking about another people lifestyle. Therefore, the rich become richer, the poor become poorer. For instance, in Africa, there was a lot of unemployment and crimes owing to the fact that no rules in their country. Lastly, countries without rules and laws enter into the inflation zone due to the unavailability of food resources. They need to import food products from various countries from small items to big things. Consequently, inflation rises from day to day. Population goes to various countries to survive. As a result, the nations are going to lose gross domestic product. for example, Venezuela was the country to suffer from inflation in their dairy products such as eggs, chocolates and so on during 2000-2010 because of no government rules. Right now, the nation is suffering from poverty as a result. To conclude, I believe that society needs rules and laws supported by higher authorities to improve their country future.
Community
directly
depends on regulations and constitutions.
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it
would not work if
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people
have free access to do things whatever they do. I completely
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agree
with the notion
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because
it will increase
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dangerous
things like
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crime
,
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inflation
and
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so
on, the reasons will
be elaborated
in the upcoming paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, there are irrefutable arguments in the
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favour
of my stance. The most conspicuous one is increasing in
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crime
and terrorism in the
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country
. Offenders are not going to
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get
punishments for the mistakes they
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did and
they become monsters
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because
of no
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government
.
As a result
, the
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crime
rate grows
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because
they need money.
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it
directly
impacts the
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country
future. Another pivotal point is unemployment among poor and middle-
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class
families.
In other words
, individuals cannot
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get
a job
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because
rich
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people
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rule
the
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nation and
they try to
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improve
their wealth without thinking about another
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people
lifestyle.
Therefore
, the rich become richer, the poor become poorer.
For instance
, in Africa, there was
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a lot of
unemployment and
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crimes
owing to the fact that no
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rules
in their country.

Lastly
,
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countries
without
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rules
and laws enter into the
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inflation
zone due to the unavailability of food resources. They need to import food products from various
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countries
from
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small
items to
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big
things.
Consequently
,
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inflation
rises from day to day. Population goes to various
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countries
to survive.
As a result
, the nations are going to lose gross domestic product.
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for
example, Venezuela was the
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country
to suffer from
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inflation
in their dairy products such as eggs, chocolates and
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so
on during 2000-2010
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because
of no
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government
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rules
. Right
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now
, the nation is suffering from poverty
as a result
.

To conclude
, I believe that society needs
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rules
and laws supported by higher authorities to
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improve
their
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country
future.
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IELTS essay society is based on rules and laws it could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do

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4 paragraphs
297 words
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