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Social media is becoming increasingly popular in all age groups. However,sharing personal information on social media websites does have risk do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

Social media is becoming increasingly popular in all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risk do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages N1VW
Social networking is becoming more and more popular in all ages. Whereas, share personal details on social media. in this essay i will disscuss the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. To begin with, i agree with this argument that many individuals nowadays are utilising social media as a common platform to connect with each other. the reason for this is that with the help of renowned websites such as facebook or instagram. people can connect to their friends or family members who are living in the different part of the world they make new connections to the another one. For instance, these days children travel in the foreign nations for their higher study, so at that time they talk with their parents and friends with the help of social sites. As a result, it is a faster or a reliable media. On the other hand, people posting their private information on the internet the reason is that, some people never know about how to use social media is there impact are good or bad they share their personal quiries such as credit card number or so on. After that they face their many issues on this platform like as theft. For example, i had listen 1000 casses of theft. Secontly, the content individual use to see on this place was also manipulated or influenced to wath the negative videos which result taken not be good After pondering over in great deal of thaught and delibeation with myself i come to this conclusion that the benefits of the internet is the faster connectivity and easy access on informations. However, advantages play a significant role which cannont be ignored or there are more arguements in favour as compared to its negative effects
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Social
networking is becoming more and more popular in all ages.
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Whereas
, share personal
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details
on
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social
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media
.
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in
this essay
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will
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disscuss
the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. To
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with,
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i
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agree
with this argument that
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many
individuals nowadays are
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utilising
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social
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media
as a common platform to connect with each other.
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the
reason for this is that with the
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help
of renowned websites such as
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facebook
or
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instagram
.
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people
can connect to their friends or family members who are living in the
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different
part of the world they
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make
new connections to the another one.
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, these days children travel in the foreign nations for their higher study,
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so
at that time they talk with their parents and friends with the
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help
of
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social
sites.
As a result
, it is a faster or a reliable
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media
.
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,
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people
posting their private information on the internet the reason is that,
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some
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people
never know about how to
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use
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social
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media
is there impact are
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good
or
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bad
they share their personal
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quiries
such as credit card number or
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so
on.
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After
that they face their
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many
issues on this platform like as theft.
For example
,
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i
had
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listen
1000
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casses
of theft.
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Secontly
, the content individual
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use to
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see
on this place was
also
manipulated or influenced to
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wath
the
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negative
videos which result taken not be
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good
After pondering over in great deal of
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thaught
and
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delibeation
with myself
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i
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come
to this conclusion that the benefits of the internet is the faster connectivity and easy access on
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informations
.
However
, advantages play a significant role which
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cannont
be
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ignored
or there are more
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arguements
in
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favour
as compared to its
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negative
effects
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IELTS essay Social media is becoming increasingly popular in all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risk do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
288 words
5.5
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