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Smoking tobacco is becoming increasingly popular among young people, with potentially serious effects on their health.

Smoking tobacco is becoming increasingly popular among young people, with potentially serious effects on their health. p5nn9
Many of our younger generation are exposed to unhealthy habits like smoking due to many reasons. They may have picked up cigarette smoking from their peers, family members or popular personalities that they look up to. Advertisements in TV or in the Internet may also give them the impression that smoking tobacco is acceptable and without any harmful side effects. Some troubled young adults may have taken into smoking to deal with stresses in their lives. I think that there are lots of ways to decrease the popularity of cigarette smoking to the young people through proper education and imposing smoking restrictions, among others.
Many
of our younger generation
are exposed
to unhealthy habits like
smoking
due to
many
reasons. They may have picked up cigarette
smoking
from their peers, family members or popular personalities that they look up to. Advertisements in TV or
in the Internet
may
also
give them the impression that
smoking
tobacco is acceptable and without any harmful side effects.
Some
troubled young adults may have taken into
smoking
to deal with
stresses
in their
lives
. I
think
that there are lots of ways to decrease the popularity of cigarette
smoking
to the young
people
through proper education and imposing
smoking
restrictions, among others.
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IELTS essay Smoking tobacco is becoming increasingly popular among young people, with potentially serious effects on their health.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
104 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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