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Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the world today. In the interest of the public health, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products. Do you agree or disagree.

Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the world today. In the interest of the public health, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products. XGGnN
Nowadays people who are consuming cigarettes on daily basis can be suffer from major diseases and death all over the world. The governments should prohibit the selling and buying of cigarettes and other tobacco items in the market. I consider this step of government will be in favour of public health. Smoking leads to a number of health problems, such as higher risk of lung cancer and hearth attacks. Others more popular affection of smoking are bad breath, stained teeth and many respiratory problems. Unfortunately, the medical treatment smokers need when they get sick is often very expensive and it can be burden on patient's family. The cigarettes and others tobacco products are usually expensive, having habit of consuming these products can leads to a economical crises to the consumer's family. The one clear example of this is the story of mukesh. Mukesh is addictive to consume cigarettes on daily basis. Due to this bad habit Mukesh is suffer from lung cancer. The treatment of lung cancer billed around 8-10 lakhs per year to mukesh's family, now mukesh family is in heavy debts. Passive smoking is one of the underrated effect of smoking. Smoking in public areas affect the children also through passive smoking which very dangerous for their health. In my opinion talking steps like banning cigarettes and other items and prohibits the consuming these products in public areas can stop many sevier disease. I personally want number of consumer consuming cigarettes and other tobacco by products should be reduced day by day.
Nowadays
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people
who are consuming
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cigarettes
on daily basis can be
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suffer
from major diseases and death all over the world. The
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governments
should prohibit the selling and buying of
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cigarettes
and
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other
tobacco items in the market. I consider this step of
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government
will be in
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favour
of public health.
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Smoking
leads to a number of health problems, such as higher
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risk
of lung cancer and hearth attacks. Others more popular affection of
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smoking
are
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bad
breath, stained teeth and
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many
respiratory problems. Unfortunately, the medical treatment smokers need when they
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get
sick is
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often
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expensive and it can be burden on patient's
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family
. The
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cigarettes
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and others
tobacco
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products
are
usually
expensive, having habit of consuming these
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products
can leads to
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a
economical
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crises
to the consumer's
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family
. The one
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clear
example of this is the story of
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mukesh
. Mukesh is addictive to consume
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cigarettes
on daily basis. Due to this
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bad
habit Mukesh is
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suffer
from lung cancer. The treatment of lung cancer billed around 8-10 lakhs per year to
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mukesh
's
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family
,
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now
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mukesh
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family
is in heavy debts. Passive
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smoking
is one of the underrated effect of
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smoking
.
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Smoking
in public areas affect the children
also
through passive
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smoking
which
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very
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dangerous
for their health. In my opinion talking steps like banning
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cigarettes
and
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other
items and prohibits the consuming these
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products
in public areas can
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stop
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many
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sevier
disease. I
personally
want number of consumer consuming
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cigarettes
and
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other
tobacco by
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products
should be
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reduced
day by day.
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IELTS essay Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the world today. In the interest of the public health, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products.

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